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Darius_Chromwell
Darius_ChromwellLv54yr
2021-03-04 02:17

while I like to see a twilight fanfic and the pairing is a nice choice the romance is way to fast and nowhere in the MC's wishes did he become a werewolf yet all of a sudden he cant control his primal instincts. sorry but no.

My life in twilight AU

Kyosuke_Uchiha
4.0
50 Chs

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Kyosuke_Uchiha
Kyosuke_UchihaAuthor

I never said he could. I said his DNA is more primal nit once was werewolf even mentioned thoughout this whole fanfic. I understand the romance part but the rest if this review is made up out if nowhere.

4yr
Alex1911
Alex1911Lv6

So he can't control his instinct? Can you clarify since I'm not sure I like to see a MC without control over his action, it's kind of a force plot for me. I like that there's no harem though.

Kyosuke_Uchiha:I never said he could. I said his DNA is more primal nit once was werewolf even mentioned thoughout this whole fanfic. I understand the romance part but the rest if this review is made up out if nowhere.
4yr
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Kyosuke_Uchiha
Kyosuke_UchihaAuthor

He can control his instincts to an extent. He can keep them on lock down but lets say something happens to Alice like, when she was going to be choked in new moon. He wouldn’t even try to hold his instincts down and just would let it run wild till she was safe.

Alex1911:So he can't control his instinct? Can you clarify since I'm not sure I like to see a MC without control over his action, it's kind of a force plot for me. I like that there's no harem though.
4yr
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Kyosuke_Uchiha
Kyosuke_UchihaAuthor

I referred to them as primal because he keeps changing his DNA to take on animal characteristics, so it’s having some slight affect on him. It is also for my plot down the road.

Alex1911:So he can't control his instinct? Can you clarify since I'm not sure I like to see a MC without control over his action, it's kind of a force plot for me. I like that there's no harem though.
4yr
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this is a realy good fanfic i hope u keep on writing it 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄

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