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2021-08-23 01:02

a bit spoiler Ahem! Ahem! as I continue to read this I consider myself stopping it as I really hate how he take Selena with him, but as I read more chapters and also think about klautz pov, I started to enjoy this more than I can think, like why hate a woman if you know that she will not betray you while also do willingly what you command to her. I hate the part where Verona interfere when klautz was fighting with Eli, but thinking about it, it was really necessary to do that part as we need it to do some character development as it was boring if she suddenly became survibedient to him. so for that part you really great author. For the lemon part, you also do great at that author that I begun to think if it was based on experience GHAHHAHA but if my hunch is true can you kindly teach me sensei! There was some typo but it was so little that you will not care about it. I also like how thick skinned our mc when they were in that secret room where they first met Verona on the bonus stage. where he do the deed with Selena even she was at that room GAHHAHHA it really turn me on GHAHAHHA and from that part I know that something within Verona will be going to awaken GHAHAHHAH I'm still at the 80s chapters and it was already awesome so I expect that it was more going to get interesting when I caught up

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Reviewed at chp93: WQ(3/5) - There are some mistakes(typos, extra words, wrong sentence structures) but it's few and far in between. Nothing amazing but it's readable enough. SD(2/5) - I'm not a huge fan of the pacing of the story. It feels very "jerky". Like a car shifting gears too quick. The plot progression so far has been lacklustre in my opinion. The premise is interesting enough but can't raise the score above a solid 3. Now for the "plot" for those who care, pretty alright. It's decent but not ground-breaking. So far we have a few chps of Selena and MC. It mostly depends on your preference, pretty rough but still quite vanilla. CD(3/5) - I'm torn on this. The MC is interesting enough though frustrating at times. The issue is that the way the author introduces us to him as a character, there are far too many perspective shifts, it's told through flashbacks and having too many in any medium is never a good idea. It's fine to be used sparingly to show past events but thats the issue, here it's used as a tool to convey the MC's char to readers, even worse is it's in parts. It might contribute to that "jerky" feeling I get when reading. Now I commend the author for actually building side characters. For example, Selena and Verona are given a fair bit of screentime and inner monologues to give us an idea of their thoughts and character. This can be a double-edged sword however, as focus might be shifted off the MC. But I'm glad to say the author divided the focus quite well. Now why I'm torn on this is the fact I like the side char building but absolutely abhor the MC's char building itself. It feels inorganic and doesn't flow well compared to how the side chars are shown. US(4/5) - The author seems pretty consistent in his updates and actually responds to his audience. WB(4/5) - The world itself is slowly being built and honestly it would be a solid 3, I gave it a 4 just because it's piqued my interest and is genuinely interesting. The world the author is writing seems mysterious and intriguing, u can't help but think there are far deeper secrets due to the hints here and there. In conclusion, a decent but rough read. The idea is solid but the execution isn't. The pacing and plot of the story needs quite a fair bit of work, especially with the MC's char building. It just feels completely inorganic to show the character like this. But here's the great kicker, premium chps are locked at chp30. That is going to greatly hurt the exposure this novel is going to get. For the word count of chps, it's just not worth it. I might return to this novel in the future but so far it doesn't look too promising. All the best author and I hope this review helps.

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