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Shiny_Shirogane
Shiny_ShiroganeAuthor4yr
2021-02-18 03:18

Welcome to the story! This is not a shameless review by the author. I believe this novel deserves 5-star. You might say that every author thinks that way about his own story. And I think you are right but I want to put forward some pros and cons pointing out as to why it deserves 5-star. I won't be listing them separately as pros and cons as I believe that some points that might be cons for some readers might be pro for the other. 1. The story revolves around a dystopia and unlike those many 'just dystopia' it indulges in not only the dangers and injustice but also the aftereffects of such a defective system and also how the residents are emotionally affected by such an environment. 2., Unlike other novels where MC is absolutely weak from the start or absolutely strong from the start (a bit too strong making a mess of the story where every problem is a problem only until MC arrives), this novel has an MC who is physically average at the beginning but has the mental fortitude of a killer. So you have it, weak from the outside strong from the inside. (this is only true in the beginning MC grow in strength) 3. The story is mostly focused on the MC so there aren't multiple PoVs. 4. The writing quality I believe is good enough. 5. The story has a setting that is a mixture of occult literature and shinobi background.

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complexsolution
complexsolutionLv12

will there be a fanfic?

DrunkenCat
DrunkenCatLv5

Will There Be A Discord With The Pics Of The Mc And His Harem?

WeAreBlank
WeAreBlankLv5

A villain but without killing anyone?

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ddevvff
ddevvffLv3

Nope, he does what others consider good, but eventually is shown to lead to nothing but death and destruction. Think Two-Face, but if his face wasn’t scarred and he still did evil.

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LO_oT
LO_oTLv12

exp

LO_oT
LO_oTLv12

slow pacing?

Boobaslurper
BoobaslurperLv4

"there aren't multiple pov" haha yeah right 🙄

Hussain_Khalifa
Hussain_KhalifaLv15

Romance?

Shiny_Shirogane
Shiny_ShiroganeAuthor

Yes

Hussain_Khalifa:Romance?
Tugudz
TugudzLv4

What’s with the poor grammar? I’ve seen you mistake there with their. Sometimes a missing word or even the wrong word.

HeavenlyAzureLotus
HeavenlyAzureLotusLv14

Hello sir. I see this was last updated 23 days ago. Have you decided to stop with this sTory :(?

Lazy_Chicken_God
Lazy_Chicken_GodLv14

Dropped?

Other Reviews
Enigmation
EnigmationLv4

Reviewed at chp93: WQ(3/5) - There are some mistakes(typos, extra words, wrong sentence structures) but it's few and far in between. Nothing amazing but it's readable enough. SD(2/5) - I'm not a huge fan of the pacing of the story. It feels very "jerky". Like a car shifting gears too quick. The plot progression so far has been lacklustre in my opinion. The premise is interesting enough but can't raise the score above a solid 3. Now for the "plot" for those who care, pretty alright. It's decent but not ground-breaking. So far we have a few chps of Selena and MC. It mostly depends on your preference, pretty rough but still quite vanilla. CD(3/5) - I'm torn on this. The MC is interesting enough though frustrating at times. The issue is that the way the author introduces us to him as a character, there are far too many perspective shifts, it's told through flashbacks and having too many in any medium is never a good idea. It's fine to be used sparingly to show past events but thats the issue, here it's used as a tool to convey the MC's char to readers, even worse is it's in parts. It might contribute to that "jerky" feeling I get when reading. Now I commend the author for actually building side characters. For example, Selena and Verona are given a fair bit of screentime and inner monologues to give us an idea of their thoughts and character. This can be a double-edged sword however, as focus might be shifted off the MC. But I'm glad to say the author divided the focus quite well. Now why I'm torn on this is the fact I like the side char building but absolutely abhor the MC's char building itself. It feels inorganic and doesn't flow well compared to how the side chars are shown. US(4/5) - The author seems pretty consistent in his updates and actually responds to his audience. WB(4/5) - The world itself is slowly being built and honestly it would be a solid 3, I gave it a 4 just because it's piqued my interest and is genuinely interesting. The world the author is writing seems mysterious and intriguing, u can't help but think there are far deeper secrets due to the hints here and there. In conclusion, a decent but rough read. The idea is solid but the execution isn't. The pacing and plot of the story needs quite a fair bit of work, especially with the MC's char building. It just feels completely inorganic to show the character like this. But here's the great kicker, premium chps are locked at chp30. That is going to greatly hurt the exposure this novel is going to get. For the word count of chps, it's just not worth it. I might return to this novel in the future but so far it doesn't look too promising. All the best author and I hope this review helps.

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