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LordInsanity
LordInsanityLv54yr
2021-03-10 14:37

Nice novel. If only the MC wouldn't go to such unreasonable and dumb lengths to satisfy his own goals(?) this novel would be great. Now you might be thinking from my first statement, that the MC is a person who would kill a person to achieve his goal. That's not what I meant. He would do something stupid or annoying to satisfy himself. Case 1 is presented in Ollivanders, he came back there after getting his wand to see his mother. Which in turn alerted Malfoy Senior of his existence. For some reason it seemed like love at first sight to him after being pushed out of her womb and being immediately disowned by his father, and his mother who was confunded? into accepting it. You think his father would just sit around and watch his spawn toddle around without bothering him? Just reading that chapter was annoying on a whole new level. You'd think a mature and rational person was reincarnated, but nope! Just a typical savant. Case 2: He joins Hogwarts, and there's no mention of the Room of Requirement (RoR). He makes a point that there's no place where he can escape Dumble's sights, but why would the headmaster even bother with him when Potter and Weasley are around? Author doesn't address it. RoR = Possible mental defenses, wealth, and more. Case 3: His philosophical debates on morals/ethics/world views with an 11 year old girl, and later another senior student. Blah Blah Blah Muggleborn students aren't treated right, the world is violent, magic. Ok, you didn't need to start a lecture to an 11 year old, no matter how smart she is. It was a senseless waste of time, instead of a lecture, just let her know in terms an 11 year old would understand. Case 4: From what I am getting here, a reincarnated grown man becomes a Malfoy, is disowned because he's thought to be a squib, and now he is seemingly hype focused on his birth mother, even implying to the readers that she is closer to him than the adoptive parents that have raised him for years? Where's the logic in this? Case 5: Should have put this earlier, but he confides hermione into his "little secret" of being a pureblood but classified as a muggleborn. He's really smart, like he was never an 11 year old in his past life or ever met another 11 year old who can keep a secret? Author has a thing for Hermione. Case 6: What was the point putting him in Ghouse? Why not Ravenclaw, since he likes to study? Overall your MC acts like a smartass with dumb reasons. I know he has some knowledge on the canon, since he mentions things that he shouldn't know several times? I am and C23 and am already frustrated.

Harry Potter: New World

HPMan
4.4
430 Chs

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AdamNics
AdamNicsLv5

I agree with all of this more or less. Not sure if he cares more about Narcissus than his adoptive parents but the Author writes so little of his interactions with them that he might as well not care.

4yr
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unknown_daoist
unknown_daoistLv14

Yep, thought so too.....the story isnt boring, but i also think there are several cases, where its just not logical pr even paradox to past actions....... But what bugs me the most is the fact you mentioned with the RoR etc. --> he has future knowledge, want to quickly improve himself BUT doesnt use these godly possibilities....i dont understand it..... So i wont drop it, bc its a chilly read, but its far from some other HPfanfics in terms of deeper magic-society thinking and logical approach of the MC with future knowledge etc.

4yr
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Rieshit_Ganguli
Rieshit_GanguliLv3

can u recommend me some?

unknown_daoist:Yep, thought so too.....the story isnt boring, but i also think there are several cases, where its just not logical pr even paradox to past actions....... But what bugs me the most is the fact you mentioned with the RoR etc. --> he has future knowledge, want to quickly improve himself BUT doesnt use these godly possibilities....i dont understand it..... So i wont drop it, bc its a chilly read, but its far from some other HPfanfics in terms of deeper magic-society thinking and logical approach of the MC with future knowledge etc.
3yr
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N0_Hope
N0_HopeLv2

Thank you very much for giving such a detailed resume on a bad experience . I really though of giving a chance to this ff but if what you say is correct then I would have gave up on the same chapter as you . Thanks for all the effort in making such a long and precise resume :D

3yr
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Boroxx
BoroxxLv11

Thanks for the review and the detailed examples, seeing the number of chapters in this story i was about to give it a try but from the examples you gave i wouldnt be able to read this without pulling my hairs out and screaming

3yr
16
striker45
striker45Lv14

thanks for review in detail

3yr
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Jackson_Slade
Jackson_SladeLv1

Thanks for letting me know.

3yr
Yum_q327
Yum_q327Lv1

The only thing that annoys here is the abstruse Hermione and ms who worsens this topic. The rest of the story is pretty good.

2yr
1
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LoveJoy
LoveJoyLv5

Great! Great! I love how they all felt alive. it's just a pity that you can not explore the filial part of life in this novel as the tag of 'Thrown Bastard' remained it his head and he can not get over it. I just also suggest to make the dialogue more proper it's hard to read it when you don't know where to suddenly stop and you need to read couple back to make some sense to it. Good Job! Thank you! Don't Drop it!

4yr

blobbombs
blobbombsLv13

this is a great novel. the MC is not an idiot who follows harry around. the plot is great and the MC character is something I've been waiting for, for a very long time. it's also kinda fast paced which is very cool. the only problem is the grammer which is also being fixed with updates on the previous chapters. so I'd say if ur looking for a harry potter fanfic where the MC is smart and not suicidal read this.

4yr
Desivery
DesiveryLv5

I have read lots of Harry Potter Fanfic, and I think for one that this is good, mostly because of the honesty of the characters and their genuity. The MC has a lot of potential but also a lot of character, problem. But that's the point, he's not perfect but he is an interesting character. I love your Hermione and Walburga. Thank you for those wonderful characters that. This is an incredibly interesting book. I think you should try this if you haven't yet.

4yr
HPMan
HPManAuthor

Hello there! It's me, HPMan. I just wanna say thank you all guys for reading and writing Fan-Fics here on Webnovel. You're awesome! Have a great day!

4yr
flvssie
flvssieLv14

This book started out okay in the first two chapters, but afterwards it feels like the author stopped caring about proper grammar and English. If this had been everything I might’ve tried to keep reading, but so many explanations and chapters were either rushed or unintelligible to the point where I couldn’t understand what I was reading. The book has a good concept, but I think it needs a major overhaul before I’d give it another chance.

4yr
Dayside
DaysideLv12

I must say that it's extremely well written and has barely any grammar issues which is rather rare on this platform. The only issue I have with this story is that it is incredibly dull and lacks passion. It just feels like reading text instead of being in a story. The main two characters, Max and Hermione both feel very unemotional and unenthusiastic towards mostly everything. The pacing is extremely fast which is good since we've all read the same events that take place in Hogwarts a dozen times at the very least. I suppose the take of the author on the Harry Potter world is just too realistic which makes it lack passion and excitement.

4yr
Usiel
UsielLv13

I realty did not like mentality, personality and naivety of the MC. Reincarnated, knows full well everything which is going to happen, yet did not take the slightest of advantage of this. Controlled like a puppet. Nerd to to the extreme. Trying to be cool and mysterious yet he is nothing but a kid with full knowledge of the cannon and idiocy of a troll. With all these points still not OP on anything. I do not recommend this. Unless you like to kill your time with something.. Not even that..

2yr
Lisa_Agnes
Lisa_AgnesLv5

Interesting read, the MC does not try to involve himself into 'adventure' with protagonist But really, with just the duo of Harry & Ron, how did they even succeed the trials in book 1, in the first place the one who knows about the Devil's Snare is only Hermione

4yr
MalfoyDraco
MalfoyDracoLv1

Good story! Please more chapters! ..........................................................................................................

4yr
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