Review Detail of CalypsoDay in A Possessive Mafia Leader

It's a good story. The plot is interesting and the characters seem to develop nicely. I really like the main characters. In my opinion, you should work a little on the description, it seems to me that sometimes everything moves too fast and somewhat interrupts the thread of the story. I think you could give more depth to the story if you'd develop certain ideas, and that will also help you immerse the reader in your story more easily. Keep it up!