Review Detail of leeroycgna in Seen Zone Z

First of all, this is a great first piece of writing material, great imagination and took me straight into the scene with some descriptive world building. Very diverse with characters mentality who share the same situation which is good, very realistic. Author just needs a little more work with sticking in past tense or present. Keep up the good work! I'll look forward to your improvement and the rest of the series!