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Lethal_Drinker
Lethal_DrinkerLv44yr
2021-02-03 21:10

Writing Quality- Grammar is atrocious, but still tolerable. The place mc is raised in is Britain yet there is no British vernacular found in the novel just the Chinese, japanese and asian vernacular the isn't even trying. Story Development- don't know where it's going there is no motivation displayed by the mc he's just going with flow and the story introduced cultivation so... it's going down hill. Just added shadow clone as well so... how it's not shown. Then the mc is making vibranium which is illogical and simply not possible because there is only one person in existence who unraveled the secrets of vibranium and how to make it and his name is Dr. Doom and he became a god after achieving it. The novel is riddled with bs, plot holes and stupidity. Like how can a person running a company in a consumer electronics sector, which is both popular and successful and no one knows about it yeah the author is writing a Chinese cultivation novel. Character Design- shallow and non existent which isn't a problem most novel on this app are such but we don't even know how mc looks. Updating Stability- so so World background- non existent The idea is very good the wishes are great just the rest of novel disappoints. Just posting honest opinion I have no intention to insult you or discourage you. It's just an opinion not a fact so it's worthless take it or don't.

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CandyChopper
CandyChopperLv6

That's just simple author does not have talent.

Aaronic02
Aaronic02Lv5

dude you cant just say that to someone even if they really do or don't have talent. at least the dude tried to make a story right? and he still managed to make people read it. and i may not have read it yet but i don't think it would be anymore worse than Chinese fanfic mtl now would it?

CandyChopper:That's just simple author does not have talent.
SageOfSins
SageOfSinsLv3

what the **** has that got to do with u??? people like u, who just gets emotional over others comments or questions are the ones who I hate the most... bro...**** ur shit out cause if the author is effected by this comments then he, himself has his fingers to type... so **** off

Aaronic02:dude you cant just say that to someone even if they really do or don't have talent. at least the dude tried to make a story right? and he still managed to make people read it. and i may not have read it yet but i don't think it would be anymore worse than Chinese fanfic mtl now would it?
Aaronic02
Aaronic02Lv5

dude wtf? i just said to not tell people things like that since not everyone really has the talent. which part of my comment made you say i was emotional? are you a kid? cause why cant you talk calmly? i never insulted you or the author. I didnt even try to protect the author. all im saying is why be mean to someone who tried to write a story? even if the story sucked or something you could have just say it normally and not complain like a btch, right? yes it doesnt have anything to do with me. i just like to comment. and you said you hate people who react emotionally to questions or comments. so, do you hate yourself? its ironic how you say that to others but you yourself does what you hate dont you?

Aaronic02
Aaronic02Lv5

and i just saw your other comments and replies to other works and i must say that was something. keep bragging about hating people who reacts emotionally to others comments, replies, or question's but in the end all i saw in your profile was insulting the works they did or just straight up complaining like a btch about everything. so much for hating people like that huh?

SageOfSins:what the **** has that got to do with u??? people like u, who just gets emotional over others comments or questions are the ones who I hate the most... bro...**** ur shit out cause if the author is effected by this comments then he, himself has his fingers to type... so **** off
SageOfSins
SageOfSinsLv3

lol ur tantrum is very funny

Aaronic02
Aaronic02Lv5

oh since when did saying something true calmly a tantrum? you cant talk sht now cant you? heh you didnt even reply to my comment so I wont see this did you? well someone liked my "tantrum" about you so I saw this. keep telling yourself that your right.

SageOfSins:lol ur tantrum is very funny
SageOfSins
SageOfSinsLv3

ohhh dude... get a life, why do u pick a fight after three days ??? fucking dweeb...

Kraba1
Kraba1Lv11

oooiiiii!!!!! didi your girlfriend cheat on you the day you weren't writing this message????

SageOfSins:what the **** has that got to do with u??? people like u, who just gets emotional over others comments or questions are the ones who I hate the most... bro...**** ur shit out cause if the author is effected by this comments then he, himself has his fingers to type... so **** off
Daoist_david
Daoist_davidLv4

just have to say good drama💯

valient_vicky
valient_vickyLv2

After reading it i don't know whether it is Sci-fic or romance novel.[img=faceslap]

Lethal_Drinker
Lethal_DrinkerLv4

it's neither

valient_vicky:After reading it i don't know whether it is Sci-fic or romance novel.[img=faceslap]
Lord_Heydrich
Lord_HeydrichLv4

This comment thread was more entertaining than the story

akasuna123
akasuna123Lv5

thanks I will avoid the story

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Aeternabilis
AeternabilisLv14

I guess I should have expected it from your explanations but because of how rare stories on transformers are I gave it a go. The story seriously lacks details. There is absolutely no info on how anyone looks. Don't know how the parents look, don't know how the mc looks. Hell, he fcks his gf and we still don't know how they look... This is just the start as it's just generally all of it lacks detail (from what I read) It's way to bland as well, from the convos etc there is no emotions. No nothing. This makes it impossible to care about the story tbh. Some of the choices as well make no fcking sense to me as well. He holds hands with his girl for half a year without doing anything? You mad? Like even if they are waiting to have *** they would def still kiss, hug, cuddle etc. Then there is the problem of the whole base of the story. The author specifically said at the start that it was gonna be based in Britain so forgive him for not knowing all the specific terms and such. The mc is then given essentially the perfect start. He is born into a family where his mother works at oxford and his father owns a small company. He can be taught from young by his mother and eventually goes to oxford to take the tests and get all the degrees etc and then takes over from his father to bring the company up to be like tony starks from iron man. What happens instead? We see no teaching from the mother and then as soon as he is old enough he goes to America... Like wtf? What was the point of putting him in the fcking UK and all that sht at the start if he is gonna instantly go to America as soon as he could? Wasting the perfect start, he and the Author could use to build off of? It just purely doesn't make any fcking sense... So yeah, from this I can't rly say it will be worth to read. Gl to the author thou as there are not many stories about this.

mistOrange
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Liboedaois
LiboedaoisLv4

Saya kira saya seharusnya mengharapkannya dari penjelasan Anda tetapi karena betapa langka cerita tentang transformer, saya mencobanya. Ceritanya sangat kurang detail. Sama sekali tidak ada info tentang bagaimana penampilan seseorang. Tidak tahu bagaimana penampilan orang tua, tidak tahu bagaimana penampilan mc. Sial, dia fcks gf-nya dan kami masih tidak tahu bagaimana mereka terlihat ... Ini hanya permulaan karena umumnya semuanya tidak memiliki detail (dari apa yang saya baca) Ini cara untuk hambar juga, dari konvoi dll tidak ada emosi. Tidak apa-apa. Ini membuat tidak mungkin untuk peduli dengan ceritanya tbh. Beberapa pilihan juga tidak masuk akal bagi saya. Dia berpegangan tangan dengan gadisnya selama setengah tahun tanpa melakukan apapun? Kamu marah? Seperti bahkan jika mereka menunggu untuk berhubungan seks, mereka pasti akan tetap mencium, memeluk, berpelukan, dll. Lalu ada masalah dari keseluruhan dasar cerita. Penulis secara khusus mengatakan di awal bahwa itu akan berbasis di Inggris jadi maafkan dia karena tidak mengetahui semua istilah spesifik dan semacamnya. MC kemudian diberikan awal yang sempurna. Ia dilahirkan dalam keluarga di mana ibunya bekerja di oxford dan ayahnya memiliki sebuah perusahaan kecil. Dia dapat diajar sejak kecil oleh ibunya dan akhirnya pergi ke Oxford untuk mengikuti tes dan mendapatkan semua gelar dll dan kemudian mengambil alih dari ayahnya untuk membawa perusahaan menjadi seperti orang-orang hebat dari manusia besi. Apa yang terjadi? Kami tidak melihat ajaran dari ibunya dan begitu dia cukup dewasa dia pergi ke Amerika ... Seperti apa? Apa gunanya menempatkan dia di Inggris Raya dan semua omong kosong itu di awal jika dia akan langsung pergi ke Amerika secepat dia bisa? Menyia-nyiakan awal yang sempurna, yang dapat dia dan Penulis gunakan untuk membangun? Itu benar-benar tidak masuk akal ... Jadi ya, dari sini saya tidak bisa mengatakan itu akan layak untuk dibaca. Senang penulisnya karena tidak banyak cerita tentang ini.

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