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2021-04-25 04:05

So many inconsistencies such as sudden happenstance, unmentioned before items suddenly become relevant and, suddenly becoming proficient in random things. The novel is heavily laden with plot armor and is rife with lazy writing, no explanation, just there. How was this even published, it feels extremely rough.

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