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YokuboLv113yr
2021-03-09 13:31

status chp485 story has a good plot, but I feel that the author doesn't like FL and ML, every antagonist who makes trouble, the writer will explain scene by scene that will catapult the antagonist to the sky, but when the problem has met a bright spot and begins to corner the antagonist , the writer seems to eliminate the important scenes like the end of the villain and go straight to a new problem. This makes FL very passive and I can't feel any emotions when reading this story, I try to survive and survive but I can't, I'm very furious. I just don't like it much. The MC doesn't do anything, she just lets sh*t happen to her. Also, I can't stand her biological family, they don't do anything to her adoptive family after they get her back and find out how badly they treated her. They say they owe her but they don't really do anything about it. As for the ML, he is emo? and forceful. They are both obviously emotionally unstable

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I agree with most of your points 😭 but with hopeful heart it get's better because I started this novel and I want to finish it...

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