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blueroller10
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2021-03-15 23:56

First 100 chapters story was pretty good. After traveling to another plane he seemed to he able to find countless god tier items everytime he walked, then proceeds to act as an OP young master who kills people that look at his wives. He also seems to be blessed by legendary creatures due to being an elf, yet completely ignores the items they give him. He also keeps helping yun che who he calls a brother, yet not once has yun che actually helped him other than when he arrived on the profound continent. Yun ches wives make absolutely no sense, he meets a new girl every day basically and talks about how much he loves them completely ignoring the fact he has 50 other wives and countless children. Also when cross heals or gives legendary items to some random girls, they never thank him and then meet yun che once and become his wife. Even when cross saves people they still somehow fall for the weak(in comparison to cross) yun che. Cross also becomes OP way too fast, it states about him going from the start of the god realm to becoming a true god in 5 years when other people take thousands of years. His wives are made OP more than cross yet dont use their opness, eg luna, she literally got the ability to look into the future, easily read minds, and detect everything in a 500 kilometer radius. while cross has none of those abilities. Once he becomes a true god it turns out his children, which have had zero relevance to the story and have lived their whole lives inside cross internal dimension, are more talented than cross, how does that even make sense, the dude literally destroyed everything in 5 years, if he had been born in a higher realm he probably could have killed everyone When he was 10, and yet his children are somehow more talented, complete rubbish. cross also kills complete realms potentially holding millions if not billions of people, because he didnt like there leaders. makes lots of sense. It states while they were in the profound continent that luna looked into the future ans saw brotherhood or burma killing them and their family, and the only way around that is if cross trains by himself. so they leave for a higher realm which has tons of high level resources, increasing their cultivation rapidly, making them (when cross attends the god convention) stronger than cross, and even after that the brotherhood didnt appear, so they basically abandoned cross and got op, while cross using worse reasources eventually caught up, and they reunite even though the brotherhood didnt appear. Basically causing cross to live without his children and family for absolutely no reason for 5 years while also slowing him down. Going back to the profound continent where he abandoned his parents and sisters, aswell as all his friends, never mentioning them again after they arrived at the profound continent, even though he stayed their for literally 10 years, there was zero mention of his friends other than two small meetings with daphne and one of hermione. Cross literally cripples himself by using only his strings as a mace for ages even though there are countless mystical arts that he learns and never uses once, because apparenlty his self made techniques which even he admitted needing improvement are better than beings who used to be true gods before they left their inheritances behind. Cross is told to be the last blood elf, with inherited memories, and yet doesnt no half the shit when it comes to the cultivation power system, he also has an ability where only the elf god ancestor had before him, yet he never uses it after getting his own armor and mace, even though they are literally invisible op sharp strings which can instantly kill people. he just decides not to use it for zero reason. After they leave the Harry potter world he also almost never again uses the blessings of the tree of life, even though they are incredibly op. The stort itself feels more like two completely seperate storys stuffed together. one good harry potter story that could have had incredible development which sadly wasnt developed and a shitty cultivation world wuxia novel with countless young master syndrome children, that always use stereotipical quotes. The younf master also only go after cross and yun ches wife even though when they attend the tournaments there are supposedly countless beauties their, if so then why at every tournament does cross kills someone for looking at his wives, it gets ild very fast. there is also the problem were only cross and yun che find the countless random inheritance and godly items, like they will walk into a random forest, yun che will rescue a ten year ild girl about to get raped by bandits, and while he does that corss finds the goldy items that the bandits ignored for zero reason, then yun che will return 6 years later and collect the little girl he was grooming with 2 months later her becoming pregnant and yun che running of into another trap either finding another wife ans never mentioning them again, or getting himself stuck in stupid traps were all his wives think he died only for him to reapper a year later with a bunch more woman.

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Monkey_Godking
Monkey_GodkingAuthor

Wow! The most in depth review ive ever seen, um can you do me a favor though. can you just put the spoiler tag on it please?

Monkey_Godking
Monkey_GodkingAuthor

Oh its on there never mind. im retarded anyway thanks!

blueroller10
blueroller10Lv4

Lol, i know the review makes it seem like i dislike it, but its definitely one of my favourites, just that there are many points while reading that i think about and was really just putting my frustrations in there.

Monkey_Godking:Oh its on there never mind. im retarded anyway thanks!
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Monkey_Godking
Monkey_GodkingAuthor

No worries actually i feel like some parts didnt make sense either sometimes the HP stuff was actually only based on my knowledge from the movies and some people from discord. A lot of other stuff are basically Yada Yada lol

blueroller10:Lol, i know the review makes it seem like i dislike it, but its definitely one of my favourites, just that there are many points while reading that i think about and was really just putting my frustrations in there.
Justmethinking
JustmethinkingLv3

so can you please tell me what happens to Hermione and Daphne? I'm at the part where they get ready to leave for ATG and they are still single.

Justmethinking
JustmethinkingLv3

Thank you for the reply, though I have no idea why it doesn't show up here. I kinda skipped to the last chapter and saw that Hermione is somehow in the harem. But I think I'll stop reading where I currently am, maybe someday in the future I'll read again.

Justmethinking
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blueroller10
blueroller10Lv4

I have zero clue how hermione ends up in harem, from previous interactions he denies her pretty hard, plus when he ascends beyond the profound continent hermione is basically an ant in comparison to him, i dont see how she ever meets his eyes seen as she probably isnt a ‘world shattering beauty’ and probably isnt that talented in the larger scheme of things. author probably just made mc travel back to the continent and pick her up, though i dont know why seen as he already has kids and a bunch of wives

Justmethinking:Thank you for the reply, though I have no idea why it doesn't show up here. I kinda skipped to the last chapter and saw that Hermione is somehow in the harem. But I think I'll stop reading where I currently am, maybe someday in the future I'll read again.
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The_Key
The_KeyLv1

A pity this Wuxia, The story was relatively good, just not giving any meaning to the elements, but this is the author's choice, but it was entering the wuxia that was horrible, I really don't understand why every Harry Potter fanfic likes spoil his own story, he could have gone on to something else, maybe even a universe he created himself, preferably following something that "every" harry potter fanfic writer forgets that is .. "be a witchcraft story", putting powers physical, or that doesn’t make sense, have you ever thought that instead of doing that, screw it up, that he had tried to evolve the previous system?

kuokyo
kuokyoLv5

thanks. You saved me time!

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