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Homia4ok
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2021-01-28 01:06

ok. so starting with the plot: it is good. It's not smt exceptionally new, but it's interesting. Character development is also ok, as the number of chapters is too small yet. What i didn't like are the grammar mistakes, though they are not that serious, there's a lot of small "typo"s and mistakes. hmmm, that's pretty much it. oh, the world is also ok, basic fantasy setting u could say. nicely done, author, but I'd recommend either an editor, or just a person with good grammar tp check and instruct u on what ur mistakes are. 🖤🤍🖤🤍🖤🤍🖤🤍🖤🤍

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