Usually, I do not give out pure 5 stars as there is always a little something, that sours the experience for me. This time, however, it's impossible to give anything else! Every aspect of this story is superb. The quality of writing is very nearly flawless with only a minuscule chance of even typos appearing. The development of the story leans on the canon timeline of events. The tiny changes pile up though, and somewhere in the not-so-far future, canon will be wrecked. The characters... Oh god, the characters. Usually, this is where I lower the rating, since you'll either have copied characters from canon or heavily ooc ones. Instead, you'll get a single original character, who believably influences others. That's extremely hard to pull off correctly, but it's done fantastically well here. Updating Stability. We get lot's of chapters to fuel our addiction, nuff said. World Background: Here, I do not only rate the Naruto universe, but also her home dimension. It's been deliciously vague till now. We get snippets of information, that keep us interested but not so much that it feels like an info dump, which is a hard line to toe. Well done! Overall, we get a reinvented universe, a lovable main cast and all around a good feeling while reading this book. 5 stars are very much deserved and well earned! Keep up the good work!
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Thanks for the detailed review and all the positive feedback. I hope you will continue enjoying my story in the future.
seem like this is going to be a good book
Your fanfiction seem interesting there, though I wonder about other review concerm about the fact other cannon character seem changed way different than cannon itself there ?, are they right ? (if I remember what they said right, feel like their personality get switched rather than a bit changed due to decision cause by your mc), and the one about "even if she expert/OP in cultivate world, doesn't mean it instant translated into understand charka energy that make her OP right away there". -------------------------------------------------------------------- Aside from those two important question, have you watch 'terrible writing advice' channel ?, because I recommend check this video "FANFICTION ORIGINAL CHARACTERS - Terrible Writing Advice", he give some good advice there about how "not" to write those topic, or pitfall most author tend to made when write it, so I recommend check it since it fun to watch and short with animated example, btw some older video do have link to 'honest thought' advice version in video description to his site there, it very good and legit tips (there are video about cliche's, basically it a tool, it not bad or good, it depend on how author use it)
I am honestly not entirely sure what you mean by the first part of your comment, but I will still answer your question about the how some characters have different personalities. Some characters indeed have slightly different personalities due to Yuna's influence. For example, Hinata is significantly more confident due to meeting my MC very early and helping her become stronger, but she still gets easily embarrassed in some situations as the original did. The two-character that changed the most are Naruto and Kurama. Naruto, due to having someone he could rely on in his childhood, and Kurama due to meeting someone who is significantly older than him. I won't spoil in what way they changed though. Other characters, like Kakashi for example, are pretty much identical to their canon selves. Yuna doesn't master chakra instantly, but due to her vast experience in training from her previous life, she obviously grasps everything much faster than a normal child would, so she obviously holds a significant advantage over her peers and even those that are older than her. I never heard about that channel, but I somewhat feel like it is a little late for that after writing almost 300 chapters and 400k words, but I guess I will take a look anyway. Thanks for the recommendation.
The first question part, I guess he mean it feel like total character personality switch/change rather than the previous core personality that get changed nearly half by the mc there ? (after all if you save a Champion before that tragic event happen in the past then he won't become the same champion later on due to butterfly effect). And thank for the answer, about that channel, you should still check it anyway since even some veteran author I know still make some mistake the video mentioned, after all nobody is perfect (another good channel I recommend is 'Writing with Jenna Moreci' since she cover lot of topic with good advice). If you want to research more in some topic then feel free to ask me. If you not sure if I am legit, then just check my post 'Forum And Writing Directory for Authors' at royalroad site and you will see it (I have 5 year of reading experience). That all, I continue reading your novel now
At chapter 16 now, it good so far, though I did leave a comment about overtrainning without rest to let your muscle recover + build foundation there, check it out. Bonus: Another good recommend ^^!. This video is also a good video that unexpectedly wholesome and give good life advice, unlike those fake/shallow Chad character that most new other tend to use without udnerstand it, video name "chad formula" by '6ixthSense', one quote example from video for relationship "Find a teammate, not a liability"
Okay, I watched a few videos and they are pretty good/amusing. Thanks for the recommendation.
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but what about Hinata having the curse seal on her forehead while it never happened and she wasn't kicked out of the clan, so why did you make this up ?
