I like the premise of the story yet I feel like the world building is lacking though this can easily be solved in the coming chapters. The first chapter seemed like an info dump just to get to where the main character is but I guess it was intended this way. The story makes me very curious as to who Ray Tristan is. Some minor lapses in grammar is also present although it is understandable and can easily be fixed. I wish you luck in your upcoming chapters. Keep up the good work.
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