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2021-02-24 18:46

It's a good start. The main character has been designed well, and the backstory of the world is great. The only thing you really need to work on is your spelling, grammar and punctuation. This brings down the quality of the writing a little bit. If you could find an editor to flesh out those spelling, grammar and punctuation errors, your story would become a much easier read.

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They say when you can’t beat them, then join them. Well, here I am with an author review :). As a biased opinion I wont go on and on about the novels good points. I’ll just give a simple idea of things to expect in the novel. 1) Will be focused on the MC’s journey - I’m basically referring that all the tags will be evenly mentioned with no dominant topic. However, this could lean more towards kingdom building and wars during the later chapters 2) World building and certain mysteries will be added in throughout first 50 chapters. - Hate to break it too the “instant gratification addicts”, but a good story needs a build up. No one likes a one pump chump if you know what I mean 😋 3) Harem will not be done in the usual happy go-lucky way - Cant spoil too much, but dont expect everyone to get along immediately. Also not every girl will become a waifu, unless their is a lot of support from readers. 4) Their will be some tragic moments that the reader will get emotional about - Once again, MC won’t always get his way here. Things will happen, but I do have a bottom line, just can’t let you know for spoilers sake (It wont be super bad so relax 👍) 5) Action scenes are detailed and descriptive + the cultivation/Powers will be simple but very novel - Always hated reading the same “Chaotic Body”, “Chaos Demon Technique, or “Heavenly Infinite Manifestion”, for cultivation stuff. Also the eastern influence on cultivation will be extremely minimal (No heavenly tribulation and stuff like that). - Now fighting scenes WILL NOT, I REPEAT, WILL NOT, call out attack names, nor talk a bunch. I find that super un-realistic and disturbs the flow of battle. Of course their will be a bit of trash talk, and what not, but it will make sense. Also no, “He slashed forward”, “He slashed horizontally”, and the like. It will be much more detailed an easy to imagine. Thats about it! If you have any questions just mention it on here and ill try and give a response! Hope you stick around and make a great novel with me! 😉

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