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MrChinchila
MrChinchilaLv13yr
2021-05-19 05:06

Alright, here it is. From the review swap. My thoughts are: The first chapter felt like a generic battle. Yet, from chapter 2 onwards the story picks up momentum and becomes overall quite enjoyable. You a little problem with overwriting. What I mean is, you complicate some descriptions that could be replaced with shorter sentences and more direct ways of describing. Sure, the show don't tell rule is important, yet if you embellish too much, it can cause a slog on the pacing. I think that is all. Overall, good stuff.

Rising Dawn

Minxs
4.8
28 Chs

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Minxs
MinxsAuthor

They say when you can’t beat them, then join them. Well, here I am with an author review :). As a biased opinion I wont go on and on about the novels good points. I’ll just give a simple idea of things to expect in the novel. 1) Will be focused on the MC’s journey - I’m basically referring that all the tags will be evenly mentioned with no dominant topic. However, this could lean more towards kingdom building and wars during the later chapters 2) World building and certain mysteries will be added in throughout first 50 chapters. - Hate to break it too the “instant gratification addicts”, but a good story needs a build up. No one likes a one pump chump if you know what I mean 😋 3) Harem will not be done in the usual happy go-lucky way - Cant spoil too much, but dont expect everyone to get along immediately. Also not every girl will become a waifu, unless their is a lot of support from readers. 4) Their will be some tragic moments that the reader will get emotional about - Once again, MC won’t always get his way here. Things will happen, but I do have a bottom line, just can’t let you know for spoilers sake (It wont be super bad so relax 👍) 5) Action scenes are detailed and descriptive + the cultivation/Powers will be simple but very novel - Always hated reading the same “Chaotic Body”, “Chaos Demon Technique, or “Heavenly Infinite Manifestion”, for cultivation stuff. Also the eastern influence on cultivation will be extremely minimal (No heavenly tribulation and stuff like that). - Now fighting scenes WILL NOT, I REPEAT, WILL NOT, call out attack names, nor talk a bunch. I find that super un-realistic and disturbs the flow of battle. Of course their will be a bit of trash talk, and what not, but it will make sense. Also no, “He slashed forward”, “He slashed horizontally”, and the like. It will be much more detailed an easy to imagine. Thats about it! If you have any questions just mention it on here and ill try and give a response! Hope you stick around and make a great novel with me! 😉

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FactsOnly
FactsOnlyLv15

Great story! Love the premise of the novel (its my Favorite genere 😄). But seriously, I have a lot of high hopes for this novel so please update author-san For anybody that wants a comparison for this book, I would point out City Of Sin and Monarch Of Evernight. Seems to have that ruthless MC that takes care of his own. Also has a really deep and realistic character development plot. Turky draws the reader in. But the best prt is the action scenes. Just based off the quality and easy to imagine scenes, I really look forward to the war arcs!

3yr
Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

This story is lit! With a talented author, this novel was in good hands. I gotta say I'm impressed! Accompanied with hard work and perseverance, this will pave well in the future! Good luck author and may your novel be blessed!

3yr
goldenchild725
goldenchild725Lv15

It's a good start. The main character has been designed well, and the backstory of the world is great. The only thing you really need to work on is your spelling, grammar and punctuation. This brings down the quality of the writing a little bit. If you could find an editor to flesh out those spelling, grammar and punctuation errors, your story would become a much easier read.

3yr
Kikiyobear
KikiyobearLv1

So I'm not good with cultivation stories. I can read the mangas just not the stories. All I can say is I can't wait for this to be turned into a manga so many people will read it. As a story, 5 star as a manga 100 stars. Just think about it. It is amazing.

3yr
QueenRani6
QueenRani6Lv3

I like, I like, I like!!! Fresh storyline and nice lead character. I just want to stay up all night to read more. Please update more, I need more chapters. I can't wait to see what happens!!

3yr
Proteety_Promi
Proteety_PromiLv3

The plot is really amazing! I like the way you developed the story. I have to say that I'm really impressed with it! Well, I don't read this kind of stories much, but I like it. Good luck!

3yr
BlindBandit
BlindBanditLv10

The author certainly has a way of writing words that pulls a reader into their own world and doesn't let go easily. The detailed descriptions are like an added cherry to the top especially, since there are no grammatical errors in the story. This story is a way better than the normal run of the mill stories we get here on this site and its marvellous!

3yr
Bunny_Junnie
Bunny_JunnieLv4

Though I don't read cultivation stories much I liked it. And I liked the way how you explained your story. As a new writer you have talent and I admire it. Keep it up dear author! I appreciate it!

3yr
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