Overall 3.3 The title, synopsis, system and cover are pretty much all lies. I don’t see clicking to level up or get points. The system is the default except it can level up with points. MC doesn’t use the system much to jam in background and characters. It is not easygoing, etc to read. It’s dry expository, like reading a diary of someone’s life. Writing 3.5 Rounded up to 4. Seriously though, why with the sentence fragments, especially when describing the uncle? Updating 5 It says 18/week. Quality beats quantity. Slow down and read over your writing. If you feel nothing, or it doesn’t have any moments that stick out, you need to fix that. Story 1 When there is a system, especially when hyped up this much, readers expect it to lead the MC’s decisions. Since the premise is flawed and the system is both shafted and underwhelming, you get nothing. Characters 3.5 Rounded up to 4. MC is shown to be mature but puts his golden finger second to his ongoing day, as if anyone getting a second chance wouldn’t try exploiting or even exploring their system in the spare moments they have. Too many people looking down on MC for my taste. There aren’t enough normal people to interact with, and MC is lowkey despite his previous ambitions of grandeur. Background 3.5 Rounded up to 4. Moments get slowed down because passages must be dedicated to descriptions. The pacing can be improved if descriptions are more dynamic and concurrent instead of the static and stale showcasing there is now.
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agreed man i dropped this cuz of all these things
Tf do you expect from a fictional world? where fantasy-like stuff exists? Especially from people's reaction.. This is just how our world is like as well. You don't see it obviously, but it is hidden behind a facade. Chinese novels are pretty good at showing disdainful people, arrogant and etc. Except THAT they show the TRUE face of people. Honestly, also have some patience. You expect him to go rush without enjoying things? (The MC) He's still in a new/different world. Should be obvious enough. Also, the system is broken as well. Keep that in mind. I hope you DO take a closer look next time.
Just so you know, your reply was deleted. Please try again... without cursing somebody, lmao. Your rewiew is good, but shtty as well. The overall stars would be 4.3 by all reasons (Not by your "own" taste, but the story itself, development, character and etc.) Saying that its overall rated "3.3" is nothing but just nonsense. At least do a better check on the story before you rate sh''t
