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Alan_ChambersLv124yr
2020-11-30 08:54

Off to an amazing start. Very excited to see where this goes. The action bits are well thought out and detailed. The story progresses quickly without leaving the reader behind. Additionally, the world building so far is pretty good, I've got a good understanding of the world so far. Characters are very likeable and relatable. Again, very excited to see where this goes! Keep up the good work author.

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Harem??

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no romantic interest as of yet

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Hi All, Author Here. First off to my current readers, thank you for everyone who has read and continues to read my novel. I truly appreciate it, and will continue to support this novel until its eventual conclusion. I think John's journey so far has been incredibly interesting thus far, and hopefully what I have in store in the future continues to interest all readers. After a year and a half of writing this novel, I figured I'd write another review addressing comments/complaints that are commonly brought up. To put this at the top for all to see, I personally believe that while this novel is good throughout, it really kicks off and goes from "good" to "great," or even "fantastic" at around chapter 70. The novel if free to read up to chapter 90, and if you make it that far, I believe most readers will come to love the novel by that point. Now, to address common comments/complaints for this novel: 1) John being too naive or "dumb" - This comment is mostly brought up in the beginning of the novel, and these comments typically disappear by around chapter 90 or so. One thing to remember regarding John's smarts is that he starts out as a sheltered 14 year old child. He's never really been out in the world, and as such makes wrong decisions, and sometimes even dumb ones from the readers perspective. This is done for two reasons: one is to write a realistic MC, as a child who is smart without flaws from the start is not very realistic. The second reason is to show growth of the character in a way that the reader connects with. With the many decisions John makes that is seen as "dumb" or "stupid," he learns from those decisions and does not make them again. I would say by around chapter 90, John is almost a different character due to his personal and mental growth, and he continues to grow smarter as the novel progresses. 2) John not being ruthless enough or too nice: This comment is also brought up early on as well. John does make some naive decisions again, many that are too nice. But yet again, he learns from those decisions (ie. the village arc) that fuels his growth to becoming more ruthless, as well as colder to those not directly associated with him. Once again, the plot points make his ruthless personality shift believable, and by the current point in the novel, John is incredibly ruthless to his enemies, even to the point that others are shocked by his actions. He will continue to get more ruthless as the novel progresses, on his way to becoming "Asura" Those are the two main complaints early on in the novel, which tend to vanish as readers progress through the story, while John develops into the MC that readers of this genre like (Smart, ruthless, strong). I hope this update is useful for any new readers thinking of picking up this novel. Thanks for reading and supporting the novel. -rRandom

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