Review Detail of Awesome22 in Demonic Online
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good english but too many logic errors and forced encounters. I didn't read very much since those are things that bother me too much. there are no " for speech and from what I read it seems to be a SAO copy so no real world building either. please read and decide for yourself, if you would like to continue reading.
Demonic Online
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So she's quoting someone that's also supposed to be written with quotes. I'm also sorry, I think your story could be really interesting but like I said it bothers me too much, that there are so many logic errors etc. And I'm not talking about the fantasy aspect of your story. Maybe you want to reply to this if you ever decide to rewrite the story.
Atlas_Dex:I'm sorry you decided to quit so early instead of finishing it. Yes I know speech goes in quotes but this story is written more narratively.