Just gonna give an honest review on my thoughts until this point, keep in mind I am only on chapter 5 when im dropping this and this review while explain why. Writing Quality: 3/5, there are many grammar mistakes, not enough to ruin the story but its just a little annoying to see them constantly, and i personally dont like first person pov, i find it makes things more awkward to read and write and doesnt convey everything as well, at least in my opinion. Updating Stability: 5/5, no idea, figured id give 5 stars cause i dont wanna mark it down if its great. Story Development: 3/5, right in the beginning MC gets thrown into a different world after being introduced to his abilities. we are given absolutely no explanation on MCs background and are immediately tossed into the plot. after MC goes into this world, he gets pretty overpowered really quickly and gets rich and profiecient in many things, but there is very very little explanation on how, like he gets rich and all we know is that he just hacked some accounts and stole money, and then used that money to buy stuff from the dark web, like way more than he should be able to buy with the money he had, and who knows how he got connections to the dark web in the first place. also, author apparently does no research on the things that MC is proficient in, like MC “heals” someone by duct taping their wound and giving them “medicines” and bam theyre healthy. Basically, its completely unrealistic. Character Design: 3/5, i generally like OP characters, but this one doesnt seem to have any personality or motivation whatsoever, and i think this ties back to the fact that we have no knowledge of his background, and he has no hopes to get back to his world or anything, its like his goal is to get OP but for literally no reason. As of chapter 5, there are no other important characters introduced. World Background: 4/5, so MC hops to dimensions of movies and tv shows, which to me sounds like a poor excuse for the author to not have to come up with original world building, however, the author does an ok job at explaining the world so far, so that even someone such as myself who has never watched the movies at least knows whats going on. Overall, pretty mediocre, i wouldnt really recommend, HOWEVER, do keep in mind that i only read until chapter 5 and it may turn worse or better in later chapters, so check it out for yourself.
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for the first, thanks for a detailed review, but the duct tape was a temporary measure to stop his bleeding, he fuking stapled them in the orignal, and I wrote that he sewed his wounds shut later and gave him appropriate medicine. he wasn't up and running, even in the original he got back to his 'business' in just a few day.
and better if you read till chapter 12, and then review, cause you sure didn't get everything, and I am a new writer there are bound to be mistakes, and I won't spend hours correcting all the grammatical errors to make it so perfect, no one pays me to write this, I won't waste so much of my time to write for a free reading site, if you want all perfect, all interesting books, you can buy a them online.
The difference between duct tape and staples is that you can pull out a staple and it will hurt, but it wont make blood gush out of the wound, however duct tape, because it is so sticky, will, and it simply would be much more realistic if you said that MC tore off a piece of his clothing and tied that one knot(im blanking on the name, i think its like tourniquet?) to stop the bleeding temporarily, as that is what would typically be done, and i suppose using healthy is too strong of a word but he certainly isnt at any risk of dying and isnt seriously injured
and I said it on my synopsis as well, please read till atleast 10-12 chapters before review
I said in my review more than once that i didnt get the full experience because i dropped it, and even told people to check itoit as it might get better, and rereading your chapters will not take hours, thats absolutely ridiculous
No, i dislike first person a ton, and with the abrubt and seemingly pointless pov switch with john wick, i wont force myself to continue reading a book i almost certainly wont like
Yes, but he just made use of what he got on his car, and for God sakes he had a doctor skill, even if he was in a bad situation, he would have taken care of that, it wasn't like he duct taped it and it got healed automatically like you described
that's your bad if you aren't a diverse reader
Thats not what i described, dont twist my words to fit your narrative, and i already said healthy might br too strong a word, but he certainly isnt too seriously injured after the vefy very minimal things MC did
Is this supposed to be some sort of insult? If you want to be like that ill change my words, i dont like first person when its done by a newbie author with 0 experience and a bad attitude towards criticism
he got stabbed and the knife went full inside, he could have died if he just lied there whole night as the wound won't magically close it, and it would continue bleeding till death
Yeah and hes much healthier now, to the point where he can sit up and stay conscious, why are you proving my point?
I appreciate criticism, but first person is not an explored area for you guys, that, from where I am, people appreciate it, and my writing is bound to make mistakes, cause English is my third language. not even first or second, but third, so I just started writing here to improve it a bit. and you haven't even read till the latest chapters and wanted to gave an 'experienced' review on it, being a newbie, even I know you read at least 13-15K words to form review on any novel or book
I never said my review was experienced, and if people enjoy first person in whatever country youre in, why not post this novel in that language, where you wouldnt have frequent grammar mistakes? Also, just because this is your third language, which i agree is impressive, does not mean i shouldnt criticize you on it as anyone going into the novel has the right to know the pros and cons of it. also, what baffles me is that i gave you a very positive review for what i read, for example giving 5/5 for stability of updates when i wasnt sure, yet you sit here in ny comments trying to insult me and nitpick everything wring with my review, which is literally only a single word that i slightly misused, i feel as if you got too used to the very positive reviews left by everyone else and are now incapable of accepting valid criticism
If i were to review your book as you reviewed my comment, nitpicking the slightest errors, sorry but youd have gotten a 1 star considering hoe fast i dropped it
Thanks for detailed, helpful, review!
