Review Detail of Tangerqueen in Pentakill: Rebirth of the Legend
Review detail
Hi there! Thank you for even making it this far! This is my attempt at a holistic breakdown of this work, but please keep in mind that it is my first time writing a story of this genre. TLDR: Not a typical OP ML who levels up in a game. More of the journey (both mental and in-game) of a top eSports player. Inspired by actual eSports players and discusses their struggles, games, and career. Writing Quality: Clear and understandable writing with minimal grammatical errors. Generally reread and edited at least twice before publishing. I personally pride myself on vivid descriptions of scenery and emotion and try to add small Easter eggs or foreshadowing, but it might read a bit wordier than most works of this genre. Stability of Updates: Pushing for an update at least once every two days. I am a current student, so please excuse me if I disappear for a few days. That being said, if you vote and comment, chances of me updating or even giving a mass release are very high :3 Story Development: Will be a moderately paced story, roughly divided into four quarters that mirror the ML's place in life: 1. Casual Play 2. Rise of eSports 3. Height of eSports Career 4. Forced towards Retirement/New Commercialization Trends *A lot of the plot drivers will be personal growth, both career-wise and interpersonal relationship-wise, so do not head into this story expecting a straight leveling up story.* Character Design: Very realistic character designs, with each person complete with their own strengths and flaws. More importantly, there will be character growth and development. World Background: Realistic setting that mirrors the history of eSports. The game, Kings of Valor, is loosely based on popular MOBAs such as League of Legends, except with different names, champions, and champion skills. (And yes I play League a lot ;-; Tbh wayyy more than I should for my own good) Warnings: Not the typical videogame story that focused on the game itself or the somehow OP ML but instead centers around character development, gamers' relationships to family and friends, societal expectations, and choosing between dreams and reality. Disclaimer: All coincidences with real life names and events are not intentional and are not intended to offend anyone. Enjoy! To see if people actually read through these reviews...if you play League, attach a GIF of your main! Also, if you wanna support me through Ko-Fi for the new Diana Ultimate skin, I swear I'll update ;-;
Pentakill: Rebirth of the Legend
Tangerqueen
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please update as fast as possible I really really like your novel but cant post a review until you hit 20 chapters it's kinda like my rule. Currently you are at 17 chapters in, just 3 more to go 😁. I am rooting for you, thanks for putting your time for writing this I appreciate the effort. Good luck for the future and stay healthy.😁👍
A*** tysm ^-^ Hopefully this story doesn't disappoint after a few more chaps, but also I honestly appreciate reviews more after people actually read for a bit more chaps ahahahah so your rule sounds great to me
Kurama_is_tsundere:please update as fast as possible I really really like your novel but cant post a review until you hit 20 chapters it's kinda like my rule. Currently you are at 17 chapters in, just 3 more to go 😁. I am rooting for you, thanks for putting your time for writing this I appreciate the effort. Good luck for the future and stay healthy.😁👍
I know it's hard with coming up new heroes I would recommend reading up skills and abilities of lol and dota heroes and mix up a few heroes to create a completely different type of hero. Just keep it up you doing really great.😁👍 The heroes you already introduced are good.🤗
Tangerqueen:A*** tysm ^-^ Hopefully this story doesn't disappoint after a few more chaps, but also I honestly appreciate reviews more after people actually read for a bit more chaps ahahahah so your rule sounds great to meimage
Tysm again!!! I have a few in mind, but the skills might be a bit unbalanced to start lolol (imma just pretend that the game is patched over the years and not that I just designed them to be too "OP" at first xd)
Kurama_is_tsundere:I know it's hard with coming up new heroes I would recommend reading up skills and abilities of lol and dota heroes and mix up a few heroes to create a completely different type of hero. Just keep it up you doing really great.😁👍 The heroes you already introduced are good.🤗
that is actually a pretty clever idea, so thumbs up for that 👍. Many heroes in lol and dota when they were first introduced had a lot of imbalances like more hp ,too much burst damage, the stun/root duration was too long etc. and then these were fixed over the years. So you got a lot of creative freedom here, but just keep one thing in mind you got write it like one had thought of exploit the hero's imbalances yet or they thought the hero was too weak when actually when used differently it's actually op. Well it's your work and I am pretty much just rambling now sorry. bye take care, have a good day.
Tangerqueen:Tysm again!!! I have a few in mind, but the skills might be a bit unbalanced to start lolol (imma just pretend that the game is patched over the years and not that I just designed them to be too "OP" at first xd)
Lololol that's what I tried doing with Alexander the Great ahahah (with the exploitations and stuff), but I think the only way I can realistically make this story somewhat interesting over the years is to rely on this patching system so that people constantly have to relearn the rules and figure out which champions are usable for what causes ^-^) Also no worries about the rants! They're super fun to read
Kurama_is_tsundere:that is actually a pretty clever idea, so thumbs up for that 👍. Many heroes in lol and dota when they were first introduced had a lot of imbalances like more hp ,too much burst damage, the stun/root duration was too long etc. and then these were fixed over the years. So you got a lot of creative freedom here, but just keep one thing in mind you got write it like one had thought of exploit the hero's imbalances yet or they thought the hero was too weak when actually when used differently it's actually op. Well it's your work and I am pretty much just rambling now sorry. bye take care, have a good day.
ty for reading :3 also idk the animations are a lot better but the skirt is kinda ermmm (whatever at least she doesn't look like a preying mantis anymore ;-;)
WanderingTaoist:What do you think about her new prestige skin? Good story tho
Haha The prestige skins tend to feel more like overpriced chromas than rare skins. I got curbstomped by a Battle Queen Diana as a Sylas. Ive been traumatized since.
Tangerqueen:ty for reading :3 also idk the animations are a lot better but the skirt is kinda ermmm (whatever at least she doesn't look like a preying mantis anymore ;-;)
ooof yeahhh the prestige skins give me the "I am hella rich" vibes (maybe because they're so shiny and gold?) and woahhhh I usually die when I go against Sylas (skill gap riprirp)
WanderingTaoist:Haha The prestige skins tend to feel more like overpriced chromas than rare skins. I got curbstomped by a Battle Queen Diana as a Sylas. Ive been traumatized since.
