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amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv44yr
2020-11-08 22:55

dude....ur paragraph alignment sucks. in small devices its hard to read and its clustered, especially since u use ellipses and dont separate the dialogues, they are like thoughts. use the ' ' [marks to signify the dialogue and dont write a part of a sentence in a another line]. even ur other bk, the same shit happened. fix it cause even if people are interested u just lose the will to read cause you cant understand. ur common wealth bk was interesting but 4 chps in and I dropped, its hard to read.

My Mother Told Me

MedTryglaw
4.6
164 Chs

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Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

bro read commonwealth it's actually quite a good story, as long as you get used to the structure of the dialogue.

4yr
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

I want to...but the structure, I just cant...4 chps in and I just gave up.

Uncle_Sheogorath:bro read commonwealth it's actually quite a good story, as long as you get used to the structure of the dialogue.
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MedTryglaw
MedTryglawAuthor

As an author, I do not recommend it, I do it for my own pleasure and do not want to encourage anyone. MC is an asshole, a sadistic asshole. My writing style has many flaws, English is not my first language. Usually, any suggestions and good advice are ignored.

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Mepha
MephaLv1

Reveal spoiler

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TheOnlyKing
TheOnlyKingLv4

This is the kind of story that is rarely found in this trash site therefore I consider it a good one. The author is not some politically correct pansy that is too scared to write a truly evil mc so that is always a plus. If you're not ready to read about the incarnation of ruthlessness in an already ruthless setting then I advise you to not even click on this story.

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Young_Dexter_1905
Young_Dexter_1905Lv13

I'm inlove with the MCs personality, honestly it's such a breath of fresh air to have a somewhat logical and somewhat evil MC that has already adapted to the universe he is in.. author I highly suggest you create a Game Of Thrones fanfiction.. I feel like you'd create an amazing story in the GOT world.

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jujubs
jujubsLv11

its really this novel,yesterday i discover this read the 3 only chapter and serarch for other novel from the author and find a really good novel of the auther called commonwealthand read the 200 episodes in one day.lol GOOD AUTHOR DONT GIVE UP ON THIS NOVEL OR THE COMMONWEALTH NOVEL

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Communist_lemur
Communist_lemurLv4

He comes to usurp the world bringing destruction and chaos wherever he goes all women love him and he does this all at the teNder age of 5??

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Captain_Bonta_kun
Captain_Bonta_kunLv14

I like how ruthless the MC is. To be honest, a good and merciful MC in this series would only die in so many ways. So far I like where the story is going keep it up 🦾.

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PirateSanta
PirateSantaLv1

My mother told me Someday I will buy Galley with good oars Sail to distant shores Stand up on the prow Noble barque I steer Steady course to the haven Hew many foe-men love you story,

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Electrum_Eli
Electrum_EliLv4

Alright, For those who want a strong-willed Mc or Ruthless Mc, This is for you or If you like the Fanfic of "HOLYJOKER" where the Mc is Evil, Manipulator, Ruthless, Selfish then this is for you, But overall this Novel is 10/10 For me Because, this is my cup of tea Question Author-sama ; Will his women betray him or are there some kind of NTR?

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Mackfro
MackfroLv11

Buenísima historia de viking autor eres lo máximo, solo quiero más más más más más más más más más más 😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂

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