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2022-12-18 10:44

Oh, dear lord. I just can't get past the first five chapters. It's all villain exposition. Villain calls himself a genius more often than Ye. Author is right that it's detailed, but in the worst kind of way. I'd suggest a complete rewrite of the beginning at least. I can't say about the rest. One chapter is all the villain should be getting for his incessant monolog. Trim the fat my man.

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