I've only read up to chapter 15 before I skimmed through the story and dropped it. The story lacks dialouge, like atleast 70% of the story is just a summarization on what was going on and I hated it because the writing quality is great but the story and characters can't develop properly if there's no dialouge. Hermione meeting Harry for the 1st time, Harry talking to the Goblins and talking to the Greengrass are very important to the story yet there isn't a single dialouge in those scenes. The relationship is so shallow because the readers didn't have many moments of them interacting/talking to each other. You can't make Harem work like that, author. I can't really think of a good reason why you would do your story like that.
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The only reason the story has little to no dialogue is because the original story has not begun yet. The original story everyone knows and I felt that there was no reason to add dialogues between characters till they actually have an unknown impact on the story. The title reads... Harry potter and the true wizarding world. The true world I wish to create will appear after the first two villains ( Voldi and Dumble's ). And most of the initial story will be the thoughts of harry himself because he is the only one that is actually affecting the original story by changing the circumstances around it. Thank you for reading and hope you continue and give it a chance.
I get what you're trying to say but it's a little tiring to read a story when I don't see the Main Character interacting with his friends or his future wives. It would be understandable if there was barely any changes from the canon but meeting Hermione pre-hogwarts, dealing with Gringotts and the Greengrass is already a massive impact to the story (atleast that's what I think). I'll continue reading knowing that there will be a second world and change this review if I ever reach that part of the story. Thanks for understanding.
maddymudda:The only reason the story has little to no dialogue is because the original story has not begun yet. The original story everyone knows and I felt that there was no reason to add dialogues between characters till they actually have an unknown impact on the story. The title reads... Harry potter and the true wizarding world. The true world I wish to create will appear after the first two villains ( Voldi and Dumble's ). And most of the initial story will be the thoughts of harry himself because he is the only one that is actually affecting the original story by changing the circumstances around it. Thank you for reading and hope you continue and give it a chance.
more chapter please
maddymudda:The only reason the story has little to no dialogue is because the original story has not begun yet. The original story everyone knows and I felt that there was no reason to add dialogues between characters till they actually have an unknown impact on the story. The title reads... Harry potter and the true wizarding world. The true world I wish to create will appear after the first two villains ( Voldi and Dumble's ). And most of the initial story will be the thoughts of harry himself because he is the only one that is actually affecting the original story by changing the circumstances around it. Thank you for reading and hope you continue and give it a chance.
