Item: “Obsessed”
Rating: 3.4
Author: KCChakry

KCChakryLv104yr

2020-10-26 16:48

The writing needs a lot of improvement. There are a lot of grammatical errors, and sentence phrasing, narrative style and dialogues needs lot of work. The story pace is rushed and all over the place without any proper explanation for anything. The characters and their actions are erratic and exaggerated. If appears to be the first work of the author so keep writing and you will improve. Reading books on similar genres will help you guide how to present a story with proper narrative. All The Best

“Obsessed”

bjalex

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bjalexAuthor

Thank you, I will do my best!

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