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SkinnyPenis
SkinnyPenisLv144yr
2021-01-06 14:11

Stopped on chapter 15, this novel is extremely creative and is good at having you wonder about the world/mc, however, it is hard to immerse yourself in due to its serious need of an editor. If English isn’t your first language it might be your cup of tea. Had to give world building a 3/5 as not really anything has been explained as of yet. Gave character building a 4/5 because the side characters are decently fleshed out thus far except for a few minor details. I believe with an editor both issues can be easily recitfied.

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Zaysay
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Thanks! im sorry about the grammar and stuff, i got myself a grammarly now though so i hope it helps

Wandering_Soul_UwU
Wandering_Soul_UwULv14

I’m sorry, but I had to write this as it just couldn’t sit well with me. If the grammar is bad and the English looks like it’s engrish instead, even more shouldn’t you read this if your first language isnt English like how tf are you gonna understand anything... so dumb. Use your great comprehension in English knowledge ( which comes from being a native) and your dao treading realm cultivation translation skills to bulldoze your way through this novel. Whiny Lamb sauce-less donkey 😂😤

SkinnyPenis
SkinnyPenisLv14

Hence why I said “might”. In my experience reading poor grammar in another language is less distracting because I pick up on it less. Its obviously an opinionated statement as its a review, meant for other like minded people to get an idea of what they’re in for before they begin reading. Not sure whats going on in your life, but I recommend finding a different outlet than name calling strangers on an app next time. Your intelligence is showing.

Wandering_Soul_UwU:I’m sorry, but I had to write this as it just couldn’t sit well with me. If the grammar is bad and the English looks like it’s engrish instead, even more shouldn’t you read this if your first language isnt English like how tf are you gonna understand anything... so dumb. Use your great comprehension in English knowledge ( which comes from being a native) and your dao treading realm cultivation translation skills to bulldoze your way through this novel. Whiny Lamb sauce-less donkey 😂😤
Wandering_Soul_UwU
Wandering_Soul_UwULv14

SkinnyPenis:Hence why I said “might”. In my experience reading poor grammar in another language is less distracting because I pick up on it less. Its obviously an opinionated statement as its a review, meant for other like minded people to get an idea of what they’re in for before they begin reading. Not sure whats going on in your life, but I recommend finding a different outlet than name calling strangers on an app next time. Your intelligence is showing.
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