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SaltyboltyLv24yr
2020-11-23 17:56

Grammar and overall sentence structure, is quite poor and broken. The depth or well how well the characters are portrayed is just rubbish at best, the mc has no personality and the overall theme is forced . The background and world building is just terrible, theres no description on the surrounding or the store. its basically just stringed together dog shit. The Systrm and Power levels are just poorly planned. System wise.... the author tries to make it money grubbing and shameless but just comes off as a poor RIP off.

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Totally agree, read 5 chapter and I can already tell many flaws. From lack of description to bad grammar to bad sentence structure to bad character development, technically everything about this novel is bad. It is a rip off of black tech internet Cafe except worse in everything. This novel don't deserve 4.6 in stars.

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