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Ashmodai
AshmodaiLv43yr
2021-07-22 15:46

Not a very enjoyable Story. Grammar is good. 4/5 Story Development 2/5 it's at the moment just Canon with an added MC. Character Development 2/5 The MC is basically an Emo that mentally complains about everything be it all Mighty or exercises or talking with other people. There is no real development at the moment but its not enjoyable to read with such an MC. Update Stability 4/5 World background 3/5 since it's only canon there is nothing much to rate. So all in all an okay work but nothing special and the MCs personality makes it rather difficult to enjoy.

Mha: Aegis the Shield Hero

Asce
4.6
80 Chs

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michilegends_87
michilegends_87Lv2

You've been a little too bad with a 2/5 for the story, it's being handled pretty well, plus as fan fiction it should stay similar to the original story (at least initially). SPOILER ON "REBORN AS THE GRANDSON OF MADARA" A NARUTO FAN FICTION, READ ONLY IF YOU ARE NOT INTERESTED OR HAVE ALREADY READ however it has nothing to do with (I'm not offending anyone, it's personal tastes) "reborn as the grandson of madara uchiha", there the story is already disintegrated from a rather early point, because MC was born several years before Itachi ( I don't know if you know Naruto or fan fiction but it was to make a comparison) and becomes, at the birth of naruto, a war machine capable of beating almost all the ninja world alone, solves every type of problem that the characters have and everything becomes a "one man show" because he makes all the other characters flat (about 13/14 years old) and then hallucinating enemies start to appear to create a challenge.

3yr
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Ashmodai
AshmodaiLv4

Your argument is pointless since fanfic authors either argue "it's a fanfic so I can go as crazy as I want" or like you just now. I have personal rating criteria that includes both cases. The 2 point story rating is either AU with slight basis in Canon or Mainly Canon with slight changes to the story which this story is. I rate all stories according to these criteria as long they are not unreadable which then defaults in 1 point rating.

3yr
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Ototsu_Yume
Ototsu_YumeLv11

Reviews are reviews for a reason, people have differing opinions; I don't see you posting on the 5star spam reviews about it not deserving them or multiple 5stars by the same person being bad for the story, double standards at it's finest.

michilegends_87:You've been a little too bad with a 2/5 for the story, it's being handled pretty well, plus as fan fiction it should stay similar to the original story (at least initially). SPOILER ON "REBORN AS THE GRANDSON OF MADARA" A NARUTO FAN FICTION, READ ONLY IF YOU ARE NOT INTERESTED OR HAVE ALREADY READ however it has nothing to do with (I'm not offending anyone, it's personal tastes) "reborn as the grandson of madara uchiha", there the story is already disintegrated from a rather early point, because MC was born several years before Itachi ( I don't know if you know Naruto or fan fiction but it was to make a comparison) and becomes, at the birth of naruto, a war machine capable of beating almost all the ninja world alone, solves every type of problem that the characters have and everything becomes a "one man show" because he makes all the other characters flat (about 13/14 years old) and then hallucinating enemies start to appear to create a challenge.
3yr
11
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Asce
AsceAuthor

New fanfic which means I must follow tradition give myself a shameless 5 star review. Either way, I hope you enjoy this new fanfic. Have a nice day.

3yr

Triston_Nomach
Triston_NomachLv3

Have you seen Aegis of Fairy Tail, it is a fanfic, where mc can use barrier make, he later becomes an S rank wizards and later the ace of fairy tail and a Wizard Saint. . It is a great story, it will help you in this story, in developing his character and skills. Looking forward to this story...

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Zenithlr
ZenithlrLv4

8 chapters in. So far so good. I got immersed in the story quickly. I love his personality. Smart and the best thing is that he doesn't care about some things at all. It is very different from every other fanfic. It is unique because the MC did not meet with Midoriya before coming to UA. The MC doesn't really hang out with Midoriya. Please don't drop this Fanfic.

3yr
SVCERVANTES
SVCERVANTESLv1

Very good story, I can only ask you to appear a romance, I was going to ask you to choose a fem! todoroki but I don't think it's possible anymore ...

3yr
EspersLv6
EspersLv6Lv3

Good story. The story is good until MC completely changes behavior at random (the reason is written, but the change is too big to accept). But this happens towards the end, a bad saga (the final saga) is not enough to make a story bad, since he has always entertained me. Let's say that i noticed the desire to finish everything quickly, when you could slowly change the behavior of the protagonist. Another negative thing is the "skills" that are created (always at random) from his Quirk.

3yr
DRAGONSLAYER
DRAGONSLAYERLv4

There are many MHA fanfic novels which are good and bad but this one falls under "Very good" catogory Great work done by the author 'Asce' Definitely recommended to read. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

3yr
MakimaChan
MakimaChanLv11

Well its not the typical cold or brash mc, but just plain ol good minimal talk and friends kind of mc, a good use of power and a great one too, looking forward for future chapter ,I hope romance wouldn't ruin it tho, it would be great if there is some romantic interaction between character and mc.

3yr
happy_sad
happy_sadLv13

It went so well untill you awakened his quirk forced plot and SPOILER GO TO NEXT WORD IF YOU DONT WANT TO KNOW he doesn't revive his mother and forces people to die because plot he already revived nine before so he could do it again The grammar is decent there are a couple mistakes every paragraph (around)

3yr
Brontoseno
BrontosenoLv4

it goes downhill FOR ME when he can control everything in his "domain". FOR ME, it will be good if the mc not OP from the begining. but gradualy become powerfull and powerfull. so we can se the progress of the story and character in their daily activity. i know that it is fanfiction story. but it will be good if the story can make the reader become exited from the progres of story. thats from me!

3yr
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