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2021-03-22 02:14

it went from great to being absolute trash. probably the biggest waste of my time ever. I don't think the author can ascribe challenges unto the MC without making him look ret*rded. he's also konoha's b*tch and takes it in the ass regularly from from danzo and others

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A solid 3 stars I dont like the forced comedic relief between the MC and the system and I also don't like the MC himself, or rather how he is written with the self-talking and the stupid (I know, he is a kid and all, but only stupid kids keep repeating the same mistakes over and over) things he does like the pranks on his family and the stupid lack of awareness he has. Now, enough of the stupid. I also really dislike that the system, and I dont mean the stupid character the author introduced as the system, but rather the real system, has become more or less irrelevant to the story. Yes, there are still levels, there is still the shop and everything: But! Has the Inventory ever been explained or made use of in the story? No Have the stat points been distributed or was it mentioned how the stats even work? Not really. Two small instances of "all to 50. And the rest to dex or agi" The levels are redundant, because we already know the ranks and they are enough to gauge someones prowess. Basically, the only reason the system even exists is to provide a crutch to the author (fucking systems with personalities, I hate them when they are not well done or integral to the story), and as an explanation for the MCs quick growth in power, including acquiring bloodlines. The quests? Irrelevant and redundant, since there are already village missions and the other missions were unnecessary. The stats? Who cares. Point already made Skills? You already got the point, although there was an attempt to make the system useful story-wise with the skills Now, I realize this was a rant, but I wanted to write this. This story started as a System story, but quickly turned into a story where the system has no place apart from annoying readers like me. And screw the aux chapter for the stats, that shit is hella annoying to look at every single chapter, not that that would make sense, since it *should be* kept up to date, so you won't even notice its existence unless you are waiting for new chaps.

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