First of I want to say that very rarely do I write "thorough" reviews for fics in this app, however when I do write said reviews it is because I find the story to be enjoyable and while containing the ability to be or and continue to be a good story. (I never had the opportunity to read the story before you took it up from your girlfriend but if what you have provided is anything to go by, then I say that she probable wrote a good story.) Nonetheless enough of that and into the actual review, that story provides a good pace in were events don't necessarily seem rushed but were the story also doesn't feel like fluff. It isn't your typical rias a*s-kissing story either which I absolutely loved. The story also avoids quite a bit of clichés that you would expect for Gamer fics. The grammar of the actual story is actually quite good, which is always a plus. Overall, writing this reviews when there are only nine chapters out I can say that this story is quite the fun read, it provides a different plot then what most would follow. That is to say that I would recommend this story but you must simply have an open-mind for something different (something different that is actually good) if you are unable to do so then just skip that story and don't try to take away from someone who is simply letting their creativity run. 8.25/10
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