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DaoistCrazy1122
DaoistCrazy1122Lv134yr
2020-10-22 09:41

This is a good story can you use Grammarly and go back over your work for errors. There are a lot of grammar mistakes. Great potential, please don't let the main character grow too fast, it messes up a lot of stories. If you fix the grammar and keep the pacing not too fast (possibly slow it down) this will be a wonderful story. Are you going to give the mc one bloodline or multiple, and how long do you plan this story to last?

Now, where am I? [Completed]

wheretonow
4.1
74 Chs

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wheretonow
wheretonowAuthor

I haven't planned any of it. I write it on the get go. Why characters are growing too fast? Because I asked, should I start the Avengers arc straight or give in between events some time. Most of the people answered straight to Avengers arc so, we are...

4yr
khazar
khazarLv5

cause kyle took 200 chapter and he still was far from avengers

4yr
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Jordan1908
Jordan1908Lv4

Argh its already over!!! This is one of the best marvel fics it's up there with burnable's post apocalyptic potter in a parallel universe. 👍🏽

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CIMO8_DAIMAO
CIMO8_DAIMAOLv2

Billions of women to choose from and he chooses take the one person Captain America loved. Would have fine if he showed interest before Steve but he didn't.

3yr
wheretonow
wheretonowAuthor

A shameless review by the author himself. Its my very first writing hope you guys like it and if you find any problems or mistake feel free to point it out. Thank you

4yr
Donald_Ducx
Donald_DucxLv4

MASSIVE quality drop in chapters. MC is unlikable, grammar is meh and the story is badly written. Don't read if you dislike bad character pairings.

3yr
xShadowyLegendx
xShadowyLegendxLv11

Broken grammar, when reading, the flow of words is constantly broken. it is nothing like the fanfic he based it off of, except the copying ability. It's more like a gag-comic as he has a companion he suddenly forgets about, then adopts a child and soon becomes an obsessed big brother figure, it's just bad. But the fanfic it's based off of, is a 10/10*

3yr
hs_chhaunkar
hs_chhaunkarLv1

Ok first of all I thought you copied but us is only to set up the story, it changes drastically after ch 15. Good you changes the story as per your readers but still follows the canon. Good story. I like it very much. Waiting for more chapters.

4yr
AlexanderZane
AlexanderZaneLv11

I'm giving it a low rating based on my feel of the way it is written. After reading until the Invasion chapter, everything is like a narrative. Its bland, and felt rushed. Still good job for trying and sharing your work.

4yr
Sercles
SerclesLv4

I don't know if anyone other than me noticed this but as far as I read this novel it has a lot of things in common to another fanfic in webnovel named "I am in Marvel" but not all but copy and story it is almost same I think......... I don't know whether this is my imagination or not but I think you guys should check whether it's just my imagination or not (In my opinion this fanfic is almost a copy with some more things (wishes, travel) that that novel [*I am in MARVEL* ] but that novel doesn't have travel powers)

4yr
SOMMO_ARCANO
SOMMO_ARCANOLv2

Reveal spoiler

3yr
Am_Potato_God
Am_Potato_GodLv12

So he rusjed all the first few chaps and then decided tojust copy another novel off of here to set up his relationships with bucky and steve minus the actual good interesting and character building moments of the novel. Overall just lazy copying while adding his own twists in to make it his own character

3yr
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