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2021-08-14 01:17

it's too confusing! some parts it seems to be a story other parts it seems to be a summary, there are also various points like the forced relationship with elly and steve (captain america). the fact that steve is a bit of an idiot with women doesn't mean she doesn't understand the situation, especially after the super soldier serum injection she gets smarter, stronger and other things. There are also various errors with the timing of the characters and also that no one says anything about the protagonist who does not age after years. Even peggy's acceptance when he tells him he has another girlfriend is too simple, the further the story goes the worse it gets, the author seems to be in a hurry to wrap up the story and doesn't explain the characters' relationships well. wakanda and steal all the vibranium like I did? no one asked what happened? etc ... I believe that when you make a story you have to tell the various details. Even as mc creates technologies in an easy way, I mean where did the factories go? where did he get the materials? don't stay inside the house take 4 pieces of iron and make the camera this is not minecraft, so the times are high, the characters have minimal interactions, the background of the world is a bit below average because apart from marvel not much is said (one would expect what the god of origin would do and various things instead nothing), mc is intelligent and only undertakes that sometimes he does mindless things that seem forced for the plot My stars: 3 4 2 2 3

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Agreed, except for the vibranium bit as he didn't take vibranium from wakanda, he took it from a planet in space.

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