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Mukson_Pautinka
Mukson_PautinkaLv113yr
2022-01-17 05:38

About 20 chapters in and the novel reads like a poorly made history book. It is just x did this, then y did that (but he didn't know that it was x all along). Rather than painting the scene of an Astartes trying to get a room at an inn and then beating everyone at drinking, the author just goes 'He couldn't get a room because he was too big, also he totally beat them all at drinking because he can't get drunk'. We can't even get attached to the character since none of it feels like it's from his perspective. Speaking of character, as others have stated: the mc is dull as a board and simultaneously the epitome of what a space marine isn't. An air headed wuss. He treats the whole thing as a game (or even if he doesn't the reader wouldn't realize because at no point do we see any mental monologue or thought process) The whole thing feels like playing oblivion, you get told to kill something. You kill it (whilst using weapons none of the NPCs could ever dream of seeing). The view pans back to the NPC's prewritten dialogue telling you: good job, here's 10 gold coins. And then walks off like he didn't just see an Astartes chain-swording 3 hobgoblins in one motion. If you just want some guy messing around in the body of an Astartes then you may enjoy this but for anything more, look elsewhere Sorry for the rant, I just saw all the xp farm comments and wanted to give a more accurate image of this novel. Saying everything is great when it isn't is worse for improving your writing then being overly negative so I hope the author can improve on what I mentioned since I love the concept and would like to see it done well.

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ElJonson
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Thank you for your honest review.

The_Swedish_Knight
The_Swedish_KnightLv13

After 70 chapters (yes quite alot) he start to lose his old self and get the mind set of a space marine remember he is a human from the 21st and gets put into a space marines body. Are you a someone that kills and act without emotions like a machine?

Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

70 chapters is too far into the story though

The_Swedish_Knight:After 70 chapters (yes quite alot) he start to lose his old self and get the mind set of a space marine remember he is a human from the 21st and gets put into a space marines body. Are you a someone that kills and act without emotions like a machine?
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