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2024-04-03 11:06

Chapter 10, thats all I have to say. Never ruined my day so fast, congratulations. Please don’t write anymore.

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Story: Mc is everyones errand boy, from very early in the story our mc is doing other ppl bidding even if its under the guise that he enjoys what hes doing. In fact hes an errand boy for the lion tribe for so long that he willingly decides to be their errand boy for the rest of his life. This stays true for the whole novel and even at the end hes literally forced into becoming the most powerfull being. Character: Mcs character is very bland, we are told hes someone that wants attention but doesnt get attached to people but its hardly ever actually shown. Other than what happened at chapter 10 whereafter the author jumped through multiple hoops to redeem mc because of backlash, there is nothing that shows off his selfish nature. World: Not really a very interesting world, theres a few continents and tribes across each one. Thats about it, no danger zones or interesting landmarks that the mc explores. We are told there are other planets with inhabitants but the mc is too busy defending this one to care. The god realm is just there, nothing too interestng in it either. Power System: Extremely boring after the first few chapters where we are introduced to it. Its essentially our mc gaining power by devouring and breathing techniques, but devouring is forgotten for the majority of the time and we are told mc uses his breathing techniques whenever he can. He gains godhood by eating the gods, no struggle to ascend or anything he just ate them and gained their power. Overall: A complete step down from authors first book, mc isnt likeable cause he doesnt know what he is, is he a selfish person who only cares about himself or someone who cares about his allies? Story is boring, him just doing others bidding the whole time, power system is extremely underdeveloped, side characters? who cares about them. To me after the backlash author got from ch 10, he decided to throw away the mcs personality and take something more safe and that ruined the whole story. For me personally what happened in ch 10 was suprising in a good way, i didnt expect anything like that to happen and it showed mcs selfish personality, if he would have stuck to his guns i think this story would have been much better.

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