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2022-01-04 08:03

It was good at first and promised a lot like other kingdom building novels but the main character failed to reach that objective a vast majority of them.

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"The Sage of Einar" is an exciting story similar to Diana Gabaldon's "Outlander", with a touch of Nordic and Viking history. Personally, I'm a sucker for stories with vikings in them. I could count the number of Eric, son of Eric's I have read about in dozens of novels. So, this one definitely caught my eyes. Alas, because I hold so much expectations for this, I too will give an appropriate review. Points to work on: -Grammar: It's definitely better than most of the webnovels I've read, but I know you can do better with your proofreading. Make it more readable, and I might just be an avid fan. -Dialogue: Now this is a tough issue. Frankly, the characters don't seem real, especially when you read through their dialogues. I may not be privy to it, but is there a modern country where a father calls his daughter, "Daughter"? This is one of the biggest issues I've seen, and it's important to improve on this because having a culture-rich story like this requires believable character interactions. If the conversations are as dry and constructed as the ones I have seen, then more should really be done about it. Points I really liked: -Story: The plot is fast-paced and interesting. I would have been easily sucked into it if there were less problems with the grammar and dialogue. -Feelings: I loved how their interactions were human-like (sadly, their dialogue was weirdly off...). Max was crazy scared when he was looking for his daughter. The daughter was hinted to be jealous about his father treating Ana well (and not her deceased mother!). It's cute, and these little things matter to me as a reader. -Representation: Greece, Japanese, Nordic, American(?). I loved the slight references to many nations and cultures. Andddd that's about it! I might have been carried away too much, but there's my honest review. This novel holds great promise, and appeals to a certain target market (me), but sadly still suffers from general writing. Author, improve more on the technicalities, and I might turn out to be a fan. :D

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