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Shogun_Sokka
Shogun_SokkaLv43yr
2020-12-11 01:31

First off I must say that the concept of the story hooked me in since I'm interested in viking culture and there isn't another novel that follows this concept that I know of. So I went into this hoping for a great novel, however the early execution of the story and character development was sub par at best which ended with me dropping the novel. My main gripes being that the author doesn't expand on why the MC has the following points or his reaction to his sudden reincarnation in the beginning of the story: 1) Knowledge of Latin at a proficient level(Latin being dead language) of which I'm certain that a 'supposed' military member of the Mexican army would not know. 2) Expert knowledge on medical practises and research (he mentions that he will 'explain' many diseases and their 'processes' to a random woman proclaiming herself to be a 'doctor' 3) His reaction to his daughter's death after being reincarnated was unrealistic to say the least. How he just shrugs off her death and soldiers on to having a full on dialogue in latin with a random woman is just baffling to me and removes a sense of realism that ought to be there. 4) Author doesn't show much of why the MC has any of the knowledge I stated above. He is only shown to have ties with the mexican army, we don't know his profession or why he was travelling to Athens with his daughter in the first place. Overall just a disappointing opening to the story and the MC in general. Many points are left unexplained and the reader is just meant to go with the flow. The MC has a weird motivation to want to continue living to and old age and conquer territory since it relates to him blaming God and religion for the deaths of his wife and daughter. The author never wrote about the MC being religious before he died as that would make more sense behind this motivation. The grammer is around average for this site but has much to be desired, an editor or spell checking would work wonders for the story. Hopefully the author can take this criticism and work on it towards future chapters and books.

The Sage of Einar

KENTARO12100
4.2
513 Chs

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rodrigo_melo
rodrigo_meloLv2

good review, i've read till chapter 8 and you are totally right, the dialogs are unrealistc and there is no development for MC's actions.

3yr
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Hua_Li_An
Hua_Li_AnLv3

"The Sage of Einar" is an exciting story similar to Diana Gabaldon's "Outlander", with a touch of Nordic and Viking history. Personally, I'm a sucker for stories with vikings in them. I could count the number of Eric, son of Eric's I have read about in dozens of novels. So, this one definitely caught my eyes. Alas, because I hold so much expectations for this, I too will give an appropriate review. Points to work on: -Grammar: It's definitely better than most of the webnovels I've read, but I know you can do better with your proofreading. Make it more readable, and I might just be an avid fan. -Dialogue: Now this is a tough issue. Frankly, the characters don't seem real, especially when you read through their dialogues. I may not be privy to it, but is there a modern country where a father calls his daughter, "Daughter"? This is one of the biggest issues I've seen, and it's important to improve on this because having a culture-rich story like this requires believable character interactions. If the conversations are as dry and constructed as the ones I have seen, then more should really be done about it. Points I really liked: -Story: The plot is fast-paced and interesting. I would have been easily sucked into it if there were less problems with the grammar and dialogue. -Feelings: I loved how their interactions were human-like (sadly, their dialogue was weirdly off...). Max was crazy scared when he was looking for his daughter. The daughter was hinted to be jealous about his father treating Ana well (and not her deceased mother!). It's cute, and these little things matter to me as a reader. -Representation: Greece, Japanese, Nordic, American(?). I loved the slight references to many nations and cultures. Andddd that's about it! I might have been carried away too much, but there's my honest review. This novel holds great promise, and appeals to a certain target market (me), but sadly still suffers from general writing. Author, improve more on the technicalities, and I might turn out to be a fan. :D

4yr

KENTARO12100
KENTARO12100Author

Hello, how are you guys, I am the author leaving a message that you should read before starting the reading of the novel. I was able to read a lot of comments and reviews in which it is mentioned that the story progresses slowly. I want you to know that the first part of the story comprises from episodes 1 to 205. It is the basis of the novel because it was the moment where the characters and the world around them were developed. This was done intentionally because in the next volumes of the novel the story will develop with more speed. I hope you can understand this before you start reading the novel, but if you wonder after episode 205 the time span between episode and episode will only increase. Of course, there will be no radical time jumps that can cause plot holes or discomfort on your part. As for the secondary story that is told, it is very important because it is the course of the world that is changing just by changing some things. From the civil war in the Frankish Empire to changes in the Byzantine Empire, all history will change.

3yr
MrJaxPL
MrJaxPLLv5

I want to see Vikings conquering the world. Obviously using science from modern world. Not ignorance and stakes. Awe science! Death to cannibal pedophiles.

3yr
81z384yjzb
81z384yjzbLv1

He made the novel premium promising to make it better ... Its not ... The translation is still bad and shows no signs of improvement ... He also slowed down the story speed so that he can milk this for everything its worth.

3yr
FirstBangDeltaWave
FirstBangDeltaWaveLv1

He should change the name to the sage of cooking because thats seems to be the main topic of this novel atleast in the first 70 chapter that is. There is too much in this novel that doesnt matter ... Im fine with side stories but every chapter feels like one

3yr
Dankster72
Dankster72Lv1

The translation is passable but the author has never mad an effort to fix the mistakes. The biggest issue is the story development, all the MC does is talk about what he wants to do but 90% of it never gets done or cant be done yet. So why keep talking about it every chapter.

3yr
EpicGamerLoot
EpicGamerLootLv1

Reveal spoiler

3yr
daremetochoosemyna
daremetochoosemynaLv13

This is freaking good. This is the story on Earth and you guess what. It does really dangerous thing though. Come on guys. Author has balls to not hide crimes of Christanity or talk about raising foxes for fur. People got really ****ed up because of peace. Even if human ability to communicate across the world improved to another level. Freedom of speech moved only little forward from medieval times. You can talk whatever you want but... It cannot be offensive. When you combine this with generation of snowflakes... It always offends someone. It's simillar to people that attack novels with rape. It's real... It happens. Hiding its existence makes things worse... We humans are ****ed up species for sure. Good luck author. Don't take snowflakes attacks to heart!

3yr
suya4ux4w5
suya4ux4w5Lv1

BAD VERY BAD. The Author might as well make his dead daughter the MC because she is the only one with the ideas it seems. Youd think after translating 200 chapters for PREMIUM use the translation would get better but instead it seems a little worse

3yr
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