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Octavius445
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2021-06-22 20:07

Ill give 5/5 since its a kingdom builder. Now for the actual review .... First off even though ima complain mostly its because its good enough to complain about and I like the story. Anyways my biggest issue with the story is the pacing and YES I know the first 200 or so chapters is set-up so I wont mention them. But after Volume 1 its supposed to pick up, and maybe it does a little bit but the writing style makes it seem like it doesn't. ---Basically as a reader who is caught up, I have to wait 1 day for 1 chapter, and that isn't bad as that release rate is quite good. But the content in those chapters are not worth the day wait, so instead you feel disappointed when you look and buy a chapter that is about cutting hair ... thats it that was the ENTIRE chapter! In a kingdom builder that can easily span 1000s of chapters these small things like getting a haircut or finding bones of a dino should be small parts of the overall chapter. ----- What I'm saying is if I stopped reading for a year and came back I wouldn't have a problem because I could skip those chapters or read them and not feel scammed by it because there are hundreds of chapters to binge read. But that isn't the case, Instead I look forward to a chapter to release and it turns out to be a character who doesn't matter getting their haircut and their feelings about it. ----- Anyways your book do what you want ill probably still read it even if I feel disappointed because kingdom builders that are readable are RARE.

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