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ABENAWAR
ABENAWARLv104yr
2020-09-10 17:18

I think its a good story personally. Straight into the action after a really short start up. This will surely turn into an action packed story and I do hope this book gets more attention.

The Legend Of Breakfire

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4.6
202 Chs

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Jogy_Kose
Jogy_KoseLv10

wow !!! Writing Quality is good, Story Development is awesome ! Properly updated and nice character designing ..

4yr

_potato_cookie_
_potato_cookie_Lv2

Truly amazing. This one is more fast paced and it feels like a roller coaster just three chapters in...super entertaining. Want more of Ashe and Adrien!

4yr
SleepyKola
SleepyKolaLv12

oh waw, just the second chaps and it goes BOOM, gotta give it five stars. Keep up the good work author! And goodluck on your WPC!! 💪💪💪💪💪

4yr
Geovi_George
Geovi_GeorgeLv1

Amazing!!! A true demonstration of the state of the art with a great imagination and avant-grade skills. Really appreciate the way the author take this as an interesting journey, making it easy to read. A real master work !!!

4yr
eyesintheshadows
eyesintheshadowsLv1

I like how the story played out. Honestly, I've only read upto the first 2 chapters, but I've got to say, it's worth a read. 🙂 It isn't too descriptive, yet it creates a good image... I highly recommend this

4yr
Crazy_Beast
Crazy_BeastLv3

Reveal spoiler

4yr
Chuck45Single
Chuck45SingleLv2

Wow. This book reads like an actual novel, the plot is super interesting well thought out. It definitely has a lot of potential. The author knows how to build scenes and background. And the cover is amazing. Keep up the nice work! :)

4yr
Amaki001
Amaki001Lv2

This is the new thing. Such a good story! Only two chapters in but it leaves you on your toes wanting for more! I love the MCs... so beautifully written, Author! Definitely worth the votes and adding to library.

4yr
NorthStar
NorthStarLv12

Thanks Author for this creative story - liking what i read. 1. Good plot - the shoe flying out from the sky indeed created a whole new dimension and where the boys couldn’t kill Ashe even they slit her throat - good twist to plant in readers mind what works and what doesn’t VR vs reality depending which dimension they came from. 2. Adrien and Ashe - looking forward to see how they will evolve post the second meet at the mansion with Ashe given this mission now to eliminate the characters 3. Kai and the other boys (which name reminds me of Ninjago :) - interesting creativity on how they existed from a faulty game development and created chaos in public 4. Darren - looking to see how he will shoulder the responsibility and fix this - enjoy reading how the character was introduce and the glitch Looking fwd to see how the game would evolve in the story. Leveling up capability or weapon acquisition and collection for them to eliminate the characters and perhaps some of these characters evolve over time - exciting plot. All in all good job in bringing VR and n gamification into the world of writing. Keep up the good work!

4yr
_potato_cookie_
_potato_cookie_Lv2

l really don't know how the author write such goood stories. its too good that I keep thinking abt the next part of the story.

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