To be honest, this book has potential. A lot of grammatical, punctuations, and tenses mistakes. But don't worry, these mistakes are common for beginners. Also, you need to research more about the thing you are gonna put in the book. This way, you can better describe it and the scenes in the story. Improve your vocab and knowledge. Well, that's all. Do your best!
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