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MikruZero

MikruZero

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Just a kid who likes to read and write different kinds of stories.

2019-01-05 JoinedUnited States
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero1d
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    Shameless review by me. This will be officially my second novel. You can message me in discord for some questions and recommendations in discord (MikruZero#2651)

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    Book of Heroes: Demonyo
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero2mth
    Replied to Glory_of_Shadows

    Sort of lmao. Sorry but I won't update for an unknown period of time

    Now Kite was panicking. Did his body move unknowingly without him knowing it? Or his body got controlled by another entity without him realizing it? Wait... I read something similar to this before. Heck, its also adapted as an anime!
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero3mth
    Replied to Dailonic

    Ohh. I understand. You see in the next chapter he will discover a new power right? Maybe I mix it up and thought that this was his second life so he was used it. Thanks for pointing it out, friend. If you have any issues, feel free to comment. Thanks again!

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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to Dailonic

    When someone pierces you in the butthole, what will you do instinctively? Of course, that is to turn around, right? Then what if the one who pierces you also move in the same direction? Then the time it will take to pierce the mouth before howling will be much faster. Well, it's still my fault for not writing that specifically. Anyways, thanks for this comment. Next time I'll be more careful

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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to meixiaolian

    I love solo leveling! Anyways, thanks for reading, big sis!

    He noticed a red blinking dot in the sky after focusing it for just a second a flood of information appeared in his mind.
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
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    Tbh, I love the book. This is usually the writing style I like. But! But, that doesn't mean that other readers will like it. Lemme tell you why! First is the synopsis! You don't have too put that much info dump on the first thing your reader will read. They will immediately get bored out of it or basically ignored it. What I recommend you to do is just make it more simple and mysterious. This way, you can arouse your reader's curiosity and at the same time make it easier to understand Second is the story itself. Just like the first reason, too much info dump. This is the problem when your setting is a fantasy world. Make it shorter and descriptive as possible. Avoid repeating the same adjectives and nouns. Use their synonyms instead. Plus, grammatical errors are found including the tenses. You often mix it up probably. Lastly is the fighting scenes and other things that need in-depth explanations. Basically, you sometimes overestimate the descriptions or you are stating the obvious. Please refrain from biasing your mc. If the first sentence describes how a sword pierces the arm, you don't have to add nonsense like, the arm was bleeding. Why? The reader can picture out the bleeding part you are telling too. Instead, add some excitement to it. For example, 'His arm was pierced by a sword. And the pain inflicted in it caused his body to lose control for a split-second'. This way, you can open up a lot of possibilities in the next fighting scene. Your readers will have a hard time determining the future and the excitement will make them more attached to the book Overall, this book has potential. If you have any questions directly ask me in discord.

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    Lynx Alpha Nigellus. The Conqueror of Oblivions
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
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    The synopsis is still lacking. Also, grammatical errors are also seen in the synopsis. I advise you to fix it since readers who read the synopsis first will immediately know that the author mixes up in the tenses. Also, the chapters are also mess up. But by simply proofreading is you can fix these problems. All famous authors have their own editors after all. If you want a cheap editor then maybe I can help. Anyways, also improve your grammar. Read 15 words each say in a dictionary, it may help lmao. Do you're the best author! After all, your book has a lot of potentials!!

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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to ky_rine

    Thanks a lot!

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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Posted

    To be honest, this book has potential. A lot of grammatical, punctuations, and tenses mistakes. But don't worry, these mistakes are common for beginners. Also, you need to research more about the thing you are gonna put in the book. This way, you can better describe it and the scenes in the story. Improve your vocab and knowledge. Well, that's all. Do your best!

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    Ungranted
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
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    A good read actually. But the descriptive department seems to be lacking. What I mean is that you really express yourselves and. I do feel the emotions of the characters. But the world background is what you need to describe the best. Anyways, continue working hard. Grammatical errors are also seen however just a bot of proofreading and you're done! Also, try increasing your vocab! Goodluck

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    Stranded from the past. Is this heaven’s wish for us?
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to Noc_Tristan

    I'll take note of that

    Don't tell me I'm transmigrated in an unknown game-like world! Kite can't help but be surprised for a moment since this was theoretically impossible. He loved to read a lot of books and reincarnation-genre novels were common. He loved to read about it and even though he also wanted to experience it, he knew it was nigh possible.
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
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    ohhhhh

    Don't tell me I'm transmigrated in an unknown game-like world! Kite can't help but be surprised for a moment since this was theoretically impossible. He loved to read a lot of books and reincarnation-genre novels were common. He loved to read about it and even though he also wanted to experience it, he knew it was nigh possible.
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to SteveWN

    Can you elaborate? It may help me improve! Thanks for replying if you do!

    Because Vanessa was surprised by the exchange she didn't react nor move. Kite was totally amazing and cool earlier. She only used the bow and attack from the distance. And although she used a knife to attack from a close distance, her skills, and experiences are more suited than long-range attacks. And even if both Ansel and she were rich and had a huge amount of skill in their arsenal, blink skills were rare. Her skill 'Shadow Steps' only gave her a short burst of strength to her legs increasing her movement for a short amount of time. She only noticed the change in his left eye. It was blue in color and seeing two different colored iris she blushed. Kite looked stunning right now.
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to SteveWN

    Yup! You'll see in the next vol

    Love
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to I_Am_L_72

    YAY

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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to MikruZero

    Sorry for the typing. My teeth ache like hell.

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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to I_Am_L_72

    don't worry about that thing. some explicit scenes might happen but it's not too. much and luckily all will go well.

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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to LesserCodex

    This book is gonna end in 5-10 chapters. The first volume

    "Feed him the pill! Cassandra bring the girl here!" Tarsus of course knew what he was doing. His father also did the same to him. At first, he was against the idea. But the Blood Seeker Class will completely transform your mind like a monster. This was why his behavior was like this.
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to LesserCodex

    Don't worry nothing bad is gonna happen...

    Dancel was intoxicated by Vanessa's smell. He couldn't take it anymore. He pointed his dick towards Vanessa's pussy and slowly put it in...
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  • MikruZero
    MikruZero4mth
    Replied to LesserCodex

    Kite's too weak yet

    Kite was thrown 30 meters away from Darcel and smashed on the ceiling of the mansion. His body was embedded there and his HP went red.
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