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WattsonSimp
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2020-09-05 19:31

Ima do this again. 10 Chapters. Good grammar better than mine 100%. Backstory its pretty damn good in my opinion. Asumi best girl. 2 Chapters a day uhh I can't even write a paragraph in 30 minutes. I love everything about it right now very good.

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SkyInTheNight
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Asumi best girl ngl

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watashiwavdesu
watashiwavdesuLv4

I state that so far only 10 chapters have been released, so this review is considered "to trust". I read a lot of fan fiction about danmachi, really many and every time there were two options to choose from. The tragic past, or one that is never explained in detail because it matters little to them. There is a third category however. I would call rarities among the rarities, where the past is simple, coincided and really serves to give more depth to the main character. This novel has one of these past. You have surely already been able to read something or if you have not read it, just read the first line. " I am cancer-stricken" essentially what it says. From here the past evolves and explains who are the protagonists that act in his previous life, and we can discover a bit of the personality of the protagonist from the first chapters, avoiding all the information of little account or meaningless.. Certainly little is taken into account about his mother, it was a bit put aside just because it wasn't important in the novel itself and could only serve to enrich the backstory more, but we know that by her character, she has always been close to the protagonist. I think the writing quality is excellent, the descriptions aren't boring and are put in order to stimulate the reader to continue reading, everything proceeds with a moderate speed, the plot is not fast but not slow, it evolves chapter after chapter in a stable way. The world has yet to be explored properly, I mean it’s only 10 chapters but from the expectation I would say that the author will manage without problems. Last but not least, the stability of updates. The author says he has never written before and that this is his first work, yet he manages to write two chapters a day, and they are very long, from the amount of pages no less than 2000 per chapter, someone even over 2500. I don’t know if it’s a natural talent or just that author is a liar, lol. The only thing that should be improved could be the use of even more specific words and more present comparisons to make readers better imagine the scenes that are taking place, but I would say that for a fan fiction on webnovel, the quality is more than good, I’d say it’s of the highest quality. This novel deserves the 2nd place in the ranking.

UncleSheo
UncleSheoLv4

I know, it's too early to judge, but so far it was fantastic, I mean it was just his backstory so far. Anyway, his death nothing too exaggerated, he was simply victim to tumour, had to leave his girlfriend alone the day after he confessed (RAIJU GO DIE!! wait he died.... I literally cursed him to death) Anyways, I never felt that his past was unnecessary, It did not feel dragged out for long, neither was I tired of the same cliche backstory, first life, etc etc. rather it touched me emotionally and made my eyes watery... damn onion ninjas... Got reincarnated to Danmachi, has a 'reincarnation system' that will be used to justify some bullsHit author will write. But I sincerely hope he isn't someone like Vahn Mason, I honestly dislike that selfless idiot breaking down every three chapter even after 1000+ chapters, there was no core development in character, same sissy manwhore collecting girls like pokemon, even Ash Kethum did not catch so many pokemons even though the title said "Gotta catch 'em all"... Look at me grumbling now.... So as I was saying, don't make him too much selfless for his own good. He didn't have time to live to the 'fullest' so, maybe this time? He has a good-natured kind elder brother type character, he has shown so far, loyal to one GF, not a harem king mat. and maybe this fic will have late romance, cuz he had difficulty to move on? IDK, just a guess... This is by no means a proper review, cuz it was not meant to be... well I just wanted to express myself and encourage the author to write some good drugs, cuz it has potential in my opinion. GOod LuCk1,

Slayer_King_One
Slayer_King_OneLv4

Since I am not good with reviews, I will try to follow what webnovel feels should be evaluated and with the same order. - The Writing Quality is excellent. I found no parts written wrong. So it is a fat 5 stars. - Stability of updates is a well deserved 5. Normally I see authors posting several chapters at a time but having 1200-1500 words each, the author not only brings 2 per DAY, but they are also long, some even the size of 3000 words, usually they are between 2000 and 2500. So I don’t think there’s anything else to add as motivation for these 5 stars. - Story development has surprised me more than once so far. The cover of Hestia inspires you to think this novel will be focused on her and then the classic novel where the protagonist follows the original events and distorts them, but so far this has not been the case and indeed, Haru (the protagonist) even has the ability to change the future, which makes me believe that the story will be completely different from the one I already know, which makes me want to hold on to this story among my bookmarks. 5 stars. - Haru was well-thought-out. Even if someone might have something to say about his "selfish" choices, I believe that in his situation I wouldn’t know what else to do but hold onto the people I love most until the moment of death. Of course, we’re all here to see compelling and heroic things, but as it was unique, passionate and above all it’s enough to reach you and make you feel empathy for him, even during his reincarnation, 5 stars so far, also considered his attitude in the world of Danmachi until what we could see. - So far we have been able to get a precise picture of the world, but since there are not enough chapters yet I wouldn't know if this category deserves 5 stars, but going to trust with the author and also reflecting on all the background that has been given behind his past, I entrust myself to the author giving 5 stars in this category too. If you’re still doubtful whether to read the novel or not, start reading the first chapters, if you feel that you don’t like a past a bit more heavy try to ignore it for now and skip directly to the danmachi world. Come back when you have taken empathy with the character, maybe this way you can try even more what the author was able to convey in those chapters, have a good read and stay safe!

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