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RedGunner
RedGunnerLv34yr
2020-09-18 22:06

Great take on Pokemon, Very different from any other story you find based on Pokemon, I would like to see more of this. Character design is good though it needs a bit of improvement, story development is what stands out for this story, Unique and fresh. World background is pretty neat. Stability of updates is good, I just hope the chapters are longer. They are getting too short, I hope the author works on this. More updates and longer chapters please.

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Einstein3
Einstein3Lv13

The author wanted some reviews, so here we go: Writing quality: Some errors along the way, but let's be real here: there are more than 200 chapters by now, there will always be some mistakes in such a mass of chapters. All around, the author is constantly getting better at expressing himself, so I'd say 4 Stars here is fair. Stability: We have 200+ chapters, nuff said. (5 Stars) Story Development: The MC is cunning, pretty intelligent. He's fairly cold to outsiders, while being cherishing friends and family. He has a public persona, which means that he is forced to act a certain way in front of others. This is realistic, as everyone has something like this. He is opportunistic, which is good. We see him realistically developing his team, while sometimes facing minor setbacks. He does have some future knowledge, but he is not all knowing and still learns new stuff every now and then. The only thing I'd put as a negative here recently developed positively, so 5 Stars it is! Character Design: I already went into this in the case of the MC. There are supporting characters too, though. And they have a personality! The author mostly succeeds to stay true to the canon characters personalities, but what puts this category into 5-Star territory is the fact, that almost all the OC's actually get a unique personality, this is hard to do and even harder to keep up with. Good Job! World Background: Well, it's a more realistic Pokémon setting, The added parts (Potential system etc) are well implemented and at no point did it feel like we got info dumped on. We got a good package at the start and the rest, we are learning along with the MC. This is a good way of doing things, so once again: Good Job! 5 Stars here too. In conclusion: Whoever finds himself here is most likely a Pokémon Fan. Those who can't stand a bit of blood and gritty reality probably won't like this one. For all those, who can stomach a darker take on this childhood staple: Give it a try! It's a good one! Cheers, fellas, and keep on creating and consuming the written word!

Legendary_Person
Legendary_PersonLv5

Alright, everyone, I assume you all are familiar with the process by now for those who are new, let me tell you how this will go down. First, we will discuss the plot of the story; the things that are happening within the story, etc. Second, we will move on to start rating the novel on multiple categories; furthermore explaining the pros and cons of this novel. And finally, I will express my thoughts about the novel. Let's start now; first and foremost, our main character's name is Alex. He is an OG character in the alternative world of pokemon, he is an orphan with an affiliation with Team Rocket. There is a fairly well-described ranking system within the criminal organization and our MC starts at the very bottom of the food chain. Alex (Author) has shown a high level of creativity while making the various details in the ranking system, he has also introduced a talent ranking system for pokemon which is described using a simple (SSS, SS, S, A) system. The Mc currently has shown no interest in tackling gym owners and is solely focused on strengthening his team which is a good route in my opinion. The Mc is not overpowered in any way and even has to struggle to move forward, he has fairly common pokemon on his team with fairly good potential ranking. The pokemon on Alex (MC) team are not the best but very original and believable. The story starts sloppy and feels a bit out of pace but with each progressive chapter, the writing, and world-building improve, as of yet, it has reached a good level; shoutout to Jojo_Soni (Editor). And believe me, when I say good, I am very critical while writing reviews; those who have read my previous reviews know that. Back to the review, so as I was saying, the story starts off at a decent level with Mc having a decent personality, though a bit naive which isn't really a problem. The budding attraction towards a girl (OG character) is also believable since our Mc is just a teenager though it did irritate me in the beginning. Let me clarify that Mc is not an idiot neither a lovestruck fool, one of the reasons why I am willing to overlook his initial interaction with the girl. Anyway, this story is more focused on the adventure aspect rather than romance which I like and support very much. The Mc has his own struggles and is capable of losing which means the plot armor is well balanced given this development is a weak-to-strong type. Alex (MC) is quite smart and a resourceful guy who's sole purpose is to become strong to increase his standing in the world, Alex (Author) has done a good job in expanding the world of pokemon by introducing more believable things in the story like the black market, murder, etc. Currently, not OG pokemon protagonists are seen in the novel even though the side characters like Brock and Steven (Future Champion) are present in the novel. Mc is ruthless well he needs to be but acts cautiously which I support. He doesn't trust anyone to a plausible level as of yet, not even the potential female lead which I also support. (Hell yeah!) Anyway, so yeah I have explained the basic details of the plot without spoiling anything major, there are things I haven't added in the review because I don't want to spoil the plot for new readers. Moving on, we need to discuss the stats. Release rate:-(4.7/5.0) The author releases a whole chapter which contains a proper schedule containing the release date of the upcoming chapters, I haven't seen anyone do this as of yet which is the reason why I am rating it so high! World-Building:-(4.3/5.0) The author is new to writing stuff but has a strong base, much better than when I started off with my own writing style. He has done a great job in introducing the world-building and other aspects but all of that needs more refining and detailing which can be done in the upcoming chapters. You should expand more on the working of the various organization that you have introduced unless you want them to be a secret for now. Character design:-(??/5.0) The Mc starts off ok, not too smart, not too stupid, not too naive, not too mature; rather well balanced I must say. There are times when I want to smack him on the back of his head and there are times when I want to give him candy. (No, I am not a pedophile, Fuck off!) Overall, I don't really have an opinion on his personality as of yet, I will wait and see how he grows. Though I hope, you work more on his romantic side of the personality, it needs to be better defined. Plot progression:-(4.3/5.0) The direction of the plot is good and well-paced but we have no idea about where is the plot heading to, like what does Mc want to achieve or what are his goals and plans to achieve his goals, this needs to be defined in the upcoming chapters as I would like to know what is he aiming for? He wants to become strong and leave Team rocket but what then? And how does he actually plan to leave Team Rocket? But this also works in your favor as you can keep on fantasizing about various things that the Mc can do and it also gives the Author a much wider range of actions. Finally, since we have finished the stats discussion, now it is time for my personal thoughts on this novel. My thoughts:-(4.8/5.0) This novel has a very high potential to exceed the most popular pokemon novel on this platform, the only criticism I can do is that this gem needs a lot of polishing, both by Jojo_Soni (Editor) and Alex (Author). The highly recommend this book and have even added this to my public collection known as "Legendary Novels", this is also the only pokemon novel I am actually interested in reading as of yet. I have been following this novel since it had only 4 chapters and am very proud of my fellow author and Editor. Even so, being as critical as I must be, I have explained all the stuff that needed to be explained. Once again, shoutout to Jojo_Soni and Alex for presenting this site with such a wonderful and refreshing read. Alright, this is it for now; you guys know the drill if I find a novel with good potential, I am always leaving a legendary review. Peace and love~ Legendary person~

45unifol21
45unifol21Lv15

Mixed feelings. That's how I'd describe reading this fic... The beginning is rough. Poor grammar/dialogue, cringey character development, and overall average story structure. I dropped it several times in the first few chapters. I came back to it later on due to some readers' saying that it got better, which it did (in some ways). At first, the MC is insufferable, well, depending on your taste he remains that way for the entire story. He is a mix between ruthless, pragmatic, greedy, vain, prideful, arrogant, and cruel. He disdains the naive, admires the strong, and is so lost in his own ego that he is a ignorant hypocrite. He has almost no empathy for humans and a limited but higher amount for Pokemon (though he often exploits them knowingly if it'll advantage him). He does not actively enact sadistic behavior patterns for pleasure but is not above hurting or causing the death of others if it will benefit him. This is true even when he does not need to hurt them to achieve his goal but will do so if it makes it easier for him. This never really changes. What does change (slightly) is his ability to form somewhat genuine friendships and emotional bonds with humans. Granted he still sees everyone except for those closest to him as tools to exploit when needed. He is phenomenally privileged (due to his meta-knowledge and cheat-like system) but spends many chapters moralizing/grandstanding other characters or in internal monologues that are meant to display his superior mentality. It is gross and pure delusion. What is enjoyable is the limited character growth and the development of his Pokemon both in their personalities, bonds, and strength. The Rookie Tournament arc is solid and there are plenty of enjoyable moments to be had. Worldbuilding is above average in some ways and below it in others. Overall I'd give it a 2.5 / 5, but for a Pokemon fic on this site a 3/5. There are parts to enjoy but also lots of cringe, hypocrisy, excess violence, cruelty, and gross themes and behaviors that are repulsive and tiresome to read through.

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