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CtrlAltKnight
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2020-11-03 14:54

A goodie with a lot of potential that can still be unraveled. Hmnn. How can I help to make this work shine more? I humbly suggest using Hemingway's free desktop app to improve sentence flow, while using the free Grammarly app to deal with a few grammar mistakes. I hope I manage to help. May the author write more, edit more, learn more, and later...earn more.

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Thank you for the review.... I haven't heard of Hemingway's App, I'll definitely check it out..... Grammarly been giving me trouble though quite frankly With spacing and wording of some words, i think because i use UK(Keyboard English) and some words it auto corrects to U.S spelling..

CtrlAltKnight
CtrlAltKnightLv4

Hemingway will help you see the passive voices as well as declutter the excessively complex sentences. It'll help you keep the flow great. I'm glad to help! Shift the Grammarly XD to US.

sae_boo:Thank you for the review.... I haven't heard of Hemingway's App, I'll definitely check it out..... Grammarly been giving me trouble though quite frankly With spacing and wording of some words, i think because i use UK(Keyboard English) and some words it auto corrects to U.S spelling..
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