Item: Football Lord
Rating: 4
Author: Bloodthirsty09

Bloodthirsty09Lv114yr

2020-09-25 17:20

Author I like how your story is going ryt now but still I would like to mention some things:- 1. First about the system, do not make the system spoon feed the skills to the mc, we should be able to see him rise through his own hardwork the system should be there only as a support. Make him lose if you have to, but make sure he has genuine skills and is not winning because he has the system. 2. You have picked up football for your sports novel and you have a great advantage because of this, there is no other football based sports novel on this site. 3. As you have just started you should increase your chapter release rate as it helps to attract readers to the novel. As you know in the beginning the pace is slow so more chapters always help. 4. Also don't make the games too long, don't stretch them for too many chapters, just focus on the important parts. Keep your story's pace a bit fast and give the MC some good friends both girls and boys. Well that's about it. Good luck author and keep writing more chapters. I

Football Lord

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4.5

71 Chs

Liked by 6 people

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cruise_Author

really appreciate

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As I have seen most authors also do, I will also give myself a five star review😁. Please Give my work a chance and let me know what you think. Enjoy your reading. Thank you

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[please release more chapters soon ] [please release more chapters soon ] [please release more chapters soon ] [please release more chapters soon ]

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Jhone_KLv11

It has potential; I like the sports genre, but there are few that are good, most are bad; I didn't like the system so much that it looks like it was plagiarism from All football skills are now mine !; I don't think the MC has to open a business to earn money because he is focused on being a professional in football, ops I forgot he has a system that helps him to play and also steal the skills of other athletes and he does not try to make his own own; Conclusion the System does everything; The MC still needs to try to be more independent of the System

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E be like say now na football related stories dey sell..😅Make sense bro..na to finish am, publish am remain. More inspiration to you and more stories from you we go dey expect.💥

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Hello guys…. This is the author, i lost my phone and ever since I have been unable to sign into any other device with that email. As it keeps on resetting the password to that phone and no option of mobile otp. i really apologize for this as it has taken this long to explain to you guys. I am very sorry and Thank you fellow daoists for Joining me on this journey, and maybe someday if i resolve the issue we would continue our adventure with Tony.

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