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2022-01-26 06:42

There is no doubt that Aina Wang is a talented writer who is capable of writing five star stories. This is not one of them. Perhaps it improves after Chapter 60 but was as far as I could read. Events seem to happen for vaugue and unexplained reasons. Character conduct is improbable. (Lia is unfairly fired so she takes a three hour nap under a tree at the side of the road. She has a second job to go to but does not set any sort of alarm, even though it s now the only source of income for her family of four. She arrives to work but is so distracted she knocks a glass of red wine over ruining an exclusive patrons white dress prompting said patron to kick her in the face. Really? Just an example of the weak story development I am referring to. Taming My Vampire Servant, another story by this author, is a much better read. I belive her writing will only continue to improve and I will definitely try her other stories.

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