Review Detail of SolAce in The last one remaining

This is an honest review, so I’m going to point out several problems your readers may have with your book. 1. Punctuation and grammar: This is the main problem I have when I’m reading 2. Paragraph separation: You need to separate dialogues by different people; it makes it easier for the reader to see who exactly is talking and to prevent confusion. I would suggest cropping up paragraphs into at most 3-4 sentences, so that other readers may comment on that specific paragraph. 3. Character design: While I do get what this character is a soldier who seems to have lost everything, I feel like he doesn’t have enough character to be “alive”. Maybe it’s the grammar that’s making me unable to immerse myself fully, but I think he needs to have a defining characteristic that makes him feel more real. 4. Story Development & World Background: I can probably see that this is a survival in the mutant world type of story which reminds me of apocalypse type genre, but I think again that this world has to have something original or unique that makes it stand from other similar novels. But don’t get discouraged author ! We all start from somewhere, and time and effort will never cheat you. I can probably help you with the first and second problems I have mentioned, so if you need my help, just respond to my review. Other than that, best of luck to you author, and I hope you continue to write more !