I wish depth and breadth were awarded by Webnovel; you'd have a home run of 5/5 star reviews! Your protagonist's first appearance as a well-characterised senior citizen with wisdom, cynicism, and intelligence to match his age, who DOESN'T reincarnate, is a gem... I dare to say I wish to give him a huge hug. As your plot progresses, it rolls out like the an Italian's 'r'. Though there are still grammatical errors after the first two chapters, I am sure they will be corrected when you return to your story in a few months. If you do not wish to wait that long to freshen your view on your writing, another strategy is reading your story as you view it on another device *using a different font size and type* - your slight errors will stick out like a sore thumb (I speak from experience)! I can feel the immense work you put into this novel and greatly commend you for your effort. Sometimes, it can be tiring when all you think about is improvement - you may even slip by the beauty you could create when you do so! My only piece of advice to offer you is to forget the pressure of perfection as you write and live in the love of the moment; I promise that you'll realise you make far less errors. I wish I had more constructive criticism to help you build your writing but I do not. Whatever editing skills you implored for your first two chapters (the Prologue) are exquisite.
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