Item: A Supernatural Apocalypse
Rating: 4.6
Author: HANA_4345

HANA_4345Lv33yr

2021-12-31 10:07

So, let's go with the strong points first... The character and world-building in this story are pretty decent. Just as other reviewers have written, it has this light novel type of building which is pretty adequate for the Webnovel platform and readers. What can the author improve? 1. Grammar. (Which the author knows since in ch1 it was mentioned about the grammatical mistakes. I recommend using Grammarly or MS Word to check on those tiny mistakes. If you are writing in 3rd POV remember that most verbs are going to be in the past tense.) 2. Being clearer. I like reading the synopsis, and it took me a few times re-reading it to understand the idea. There's also a lot of redundant sentences. The same goes for the chapters I have read so far. You need to describe so your readers know but prevent being redundant. Try using pronouns. And... that's all. I hope that maybe someday the author will go back and edit the chapters. This story can have a lot of potential with a bit of more polishing.

A Supernatural Apocalypse

Bit_Lucky

4.8

77 Chs

Liked by 2 people

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Bit_LuckyAuthor

Thanks for the review it's been a while since I got a review that was clear on what I had to fix thanks

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I don't care if you out the web novel put me in the rankings or not All I want is you people to add this to your library, Love it, Share it, and also keep reading increasing the people who read this. i just want you all to have a wonderful time reading this. Check my other story if you want to in original works.

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First, I have a question, do you read light novels? this is exactly the format of a light novel. you have a character page, description of powers, characteristic of protagonist page, and most importantly, it is easy to understand and absorb. why am I asking? because I love light novels. and I clearly admire anyone who also loves to create one. thank you for an enjoyable read, and for reminding me of my favorite kind of book there is.

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Perfect book dear author you are an amazing writer who one in a million best book are been liked by me your book are amazing and wonderful I usually don't like these types of book but I give it a try and I was amazed with the talent and words that are in it it touches my heart and that I really loved it right now I am running out of words to say I will say I rate this novel 100% The best I could have done you are an amazing writer keep it up 🎖 your book \ novels mean alot to me you are one of the best author in the world . and I wish you all the best in the future and continue to achieve perfection and write more novel can't wait to see more chapters from your sincerely fan Vanessa dowlatram thank you very much for letting me comment on your book😀 \novel.🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎖🎗🎗🎗🎗🎗🎊🎊🎊🎊🎊🎊🎖🎖🎖🎖

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