Review Detail of bibiyenini in Till Our Worlds Collide

A good and simple story with the right touch of light drama coming your way. Good points you have in the story: 1) You have an exemplary plotline that will make the readers trigger their butterflies in their stomach whenever they will read this. 2) You have this genuine idea about love that makes me wonder what if my boy crush and my world would collide in the future or maybe in the present time. Negative feedback (for me): 1) I want to suggest that make the point of view of the synopsis into one only. You tend to mix up with the character's mind and the omniscient point of view. If you use the third person limited, that means you only have to focus with the mind of your main character. If you the third person point of view on the omniscient, you have to describe the characteristic and thoughts of the deuteragonists and the extras on the story. I suggest to do the latter for the synopsis. 2) I've seen a few grammatical errors in the first chapters, but that's okay, we could fix it. (Please do not hate me. I have shared my thoughts and learnings from this career to you.) Good job and best of luck, author!