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2021-02-07 14:46

First of all, it's an amazing story that tells about stratagem and some power cultivation. Though the story feels boring from the start eventually you will get hooked and start following the story. The character development is good. Overall a good novel to read if you want some action and strategist type MC. Keep it up, Author. Ps. I just want to criticize or suggest to the Author that to make the battle map or battlefield clearer because it's a little bit confusing to imagine where is the position of the MC, his allies, the enemies, and key points. I recommend adding distance and general direction(ex. The battle begins in the open field, the mc is facing north while the enemy facing south, the mc can't find a position to exploit other than fighting head-on because in his left is a mountain range while 3 km east of his position is a wide river that flows from northeast to southwest.)

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I agree, thanks for the wonderful review at the end. the criticism is very welcomed.

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