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2020-07-27 01:20

The story has good grammar and it’s entertaining even though there’s only 3 chapters but I’m looking forward to reading more as you release it. Oh yeah if you ever need help editing I don’t mind helping you out because I feel like this story and you have a lot of potential.

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